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What is a climax of a story?
（什么是故事高潮
?
）
More tension=satisfying climax
< br>文学故事中的高潮（
climax
）
----
故事的主要场景（
key scene
）也通常是故事的转折点
（
turning po
int
），是指故事达到最紧张或扣人心弦的那一部分。高潮有时候是剧情中
的
危机
点。
有时候
,
它只是达到关键时刻或者转折点
,
发生了一些事情
,
或者主角必
须做出决定
,
从而导致一个结果或其他。我们在分析叙事类故事或者小说故事的时候常
常
用下面的图表来表示故事情节。
常见故事高潮示例：
1. A
little girl has been searching for her lost dog.
All of a sudden, she hears a bark
coming from around the corner, and she
looks around to see . . .
2. Kevin has
worked very hard to try out for the soccer team at
school. The coach has
posted a list of
this year's team members on his office door. Kevin
walks forward to
look at the list . . .
.
3. Mary's parents have been
discussing whether or not to move to another
state. They
call Mary and her sister
down to talk with them about their decision . . .
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4.
Lois has performed in the state gymnastics finals.
She waits anxiously to hear the
names
of the winners. The announcer says,
文学名著中的一些故事高潮
1.
The deaths of Romeo (who kills himself because he
thinks Juliet is dead) and
Juliet
(who
kills
herself
when
she
awakes
and
sees
Romeo
dead).
Romeo
and
Juliet,
Shakespeare
（罗密欧和朱丽叶，莎士比亚）
2. When Gaston and the townspeople come
to attack the beast, and Belle admits
her love for the beast. Beauty and the
Beast, Disney
（美女与野兽，迪士尼）
3. In
the third pig and the
wolf. This confrontation is the
climax.
（三只小猪）
How to create a climax of a story?
(
如何营造故事的高潮？
)
方法
1.
增加外部冲突
增加外部冲突是一种明显有效的可以达到故事高潮的方式。
冲突
带来紧迫感
,
将故事推向
必要的解决或崩溃。
1
）角色之间的冲突
(
人物观点差异
,
竞争需要等
)
如
：
2017
年
11
月
浙
江
英
语
高
考
：
On
the
fourth
or
fifth
night,
we
had trouble finding a hotel with a
vacancy. After driving in vain for some time,
Mom suddenly got a great idea: Why
didn't we find a house with a likely-looking
backyard and ask if we could set up
tent there? David and I became nervous.
开
车找旅馆
---
徒劳无功
---
母亲建议搭帐篷在他人后院
---Dav
id
和我倍感紧张，心有不悦
（母子的观点不一）
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2)
角色与环境之间的冲突
如：
2017
年
6
月浙江英
语高考：
Then Mac heard quick and loud
breathing behind
him.
……
he saw instantly that it
wasn't a dog at all, but a wolf: quickly catching
up
with
him.
Mac's
heart jumped.
……
,
he
fired
the
spray
at
the
wolf.
A
bright
red
cloud enveloped the animal, and to Mac's relief,
it fell back, shaking its head.
But a
minute later,
……
. Then it
……
, tearing open his tent
bag. He fired at the
wolf a second
time, and again, it fell back
……
Mac
骑车独自行，路遇饿狼，与之搏斗，险象环生。
（人（角色）
-
---
狼（环境）大战）
3)
时间依赖的发展
：决策变得紧急
如：
2017
年
6
月浙江英语高考：
The car abruptly
stopped in front of him.
the
car.
shouted
at
Mac.
Mac jumped off
the
bike
and
slid
into
the
car
without
delay
as
the
wolf
was
just
two
steps
away
and
was
about
to
tear Mac into pieces. What a narrow
escape!
骑车突停面前
---
急喊上车
---Max
上车
避险
---
饿狼近在咫尺（此情此景，刻不容缓）
4)
增加的障碍
：人物角色必须克服
挑战
,
以达到他们的目标
例如：
2018
年
6
月高考
But before we jumped off the horses, we
found that we had
been off the beaten
track and got lost. We had no idea where we were
and it got
dark. Exhausted and hungry,
I wondered if we could find our way back.
小兔突现
---
马儿受惊
--
-
草原迷路（障碍
1
）
----
天色渐黑（障碍
2
）
----
又累又饿（障碍
3
）
----
心理恐慌（障碍
4
）
方法
2.
放大内心冲突
放大内心冲突（你的角
色的内心斗争）也有助于建立一个高度紧张和不确定的时刻。
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现在我们在来看高考读后续写中的内心冲突是如何体现的：
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2016
年
10
月浙江高考：
Immediately, an absolute
darkness ruled the forest. Jane,
exhausted and scared, lay down near a
stone, missing her family at a distance.
All
the
fantastic
memory
crowded
in
and
she
couldn't
help
crying,
I
quarrelled with
Tom, walked away and climbed to the high place, I
wouldn't
be trapped in
this
awful place, confronted
with
the
danger of
dying.
”
She
regretted with endless anxiety, and
then became asleep with shining tears in her
eyes.
夫妇争吵
---
独自行走
---
荒野走散
---
夜色渐黑
---
独处森林
---
阴森恐怖
---
后悔莫及（内
心冲突的刻画）内心独白
（往昔对比
+
虚拟语气使用
+
旁边
描写是常见技巧之一）
方法
3.
使用环境描写增加不确定性
充分利用
环境描写可以起到烘托故事高潮的作用，
具体方法可以看上期读后续写微技能。
当故事角色在碰到困难时候，
我们往往要加大笔墨来描写故事环境的黑暗
，
恐怖和不祥。
强化环境描写增强了高潮元素。我们感受到了紧
张的倍增。
例
1
：
Immediately, an absolute darkness
ruled the forest(
黑暗
). Even
worse, the
temperature suddenly dropped
dramatically. (
寒冷）
例
2
：
It
didn
’
t take long for the
forest to be enveloped in
darkness
（黑暗）
. Her
rasping
breath
steamed
（寒冷）
in
the
moonlight
and
her
throat
was
parched
from thirst.
如
何
通
过
场
景
营
造
（
mood
）
Technique 1: Personification
(
拟人
)
Description/purpose:
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Gives an object
the characteristics of a living thing, bringing it
to life
Examples
：
The flowers nodded.
Snowflakes danced.
Thunder
grumbled.
Fog crept in.
The
wind howled.
The haunted house seemed
to stare at me, beckoning me towards the door.
Technique 2: simile
(
明喻
)
Description/purpose:
Similes
likens something to
something else giving a more detailed description
Examples
：
The night sky was as dark as the
deepest ocean.
The stars sparkled like
diamonds.
The snake moved like a ripple
on a pond.
Technique 3: metaphor
(
暗喻
)
Description/purpose:
Metaphors
say
that
something
is
something
else,
giving
the
description
more
power
Examples
：
A wave of terror washed over him.
Technique 4:Vivid adjectives
(
生动的形容词
)
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Description/purpose:
To
make
the
story
more
interesting
and
vivid
by
using
more
imaginative
descriptions, sometimes in a list
Examples
：
Gleaming, glistening, whispery flakes
of snow
Technique 5: Negative
description
(
否定描述
)
Description/purpose:
To
tell
the
reader
what
is
not
there
is
an
effective
way
of
showing
how
unpleasant, comfortless a place is
Examples
：
There was no cushion, no carpet, no
warmth, no light and no comfort.
Technique 6: Camera-pan and zoom (
摄影
-
全景
+
放大
)
Description/purpose:
To
use
the
idea
of
how
a
film
director
works,
you
can
give
a
wider
view
then
focus
in on one detail
Examples
：
From
the
withering
trees
he
looked
past
the littered
farmyard,
across
to
the
decrepit hovel. Its doors hung sadly
awry, the handle broken.
Technique 7:
Nouns for details
(
细节名词
)
Description/purpose:
Scenes are filled with things that we
see and therefore uses lots of nouns, even
lists of nouns to convey what is there.
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