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读后续写之提分秘籍——细节描写
《考试说明
》
中评分原则部分规定，
读后续写阅卷时按
5
个档次给分。
参考最高档次第
五
档（
21-25
分）的描述并考虑写作部分评分的其它因素，可
以认为一篇优秀的读后续写具
备以下特征：
1.
内容丰富充实，与所给短文融洽连贯；
2.
连接成分应用得当，行文结构紧凑一体，与所提供各段落
开头语的衔接紧密合理；
3.
使用
并用下划线标示
5
个以上短文中标出的关键词语；
4.
词汇丰富高级，语法准确多变（主被动句式
、各类从句、特殊句式、非谓语动词等的使
用情况灵活恰当、不拘一格、游刃有余）
；
5.
词数充
分，
150
词左右。评分细则规定少于
130
词的，从总分中减去
2
分；
6.
拼写准确，英式或美式拼法皆可；
7.
标点合理，使用得当。
读后续写基本是以记叙文为主，而记叙文是以记人叙事为主要内容，以叙述为主要表
达方式来反映丰富多彩的现实生活的一种文体。
一般来说，
完成一篇完整的记叙文写作，
需
要选取合适的角度、<
/p>
按照一定的顺序组织素材进行叙述，
其中包括六个基本要素：
时间、地
点、
人物，
事情的起因、
经过和结果，
即我们通常所说的五个
“
W
”
（
what,
who,
when,
where,
why
）和一个“
H
”
（
how
）
。除此之外，鲜明的主题和生动的语言，也是一篇优秀的记叙文所
不可或缺的。
描写作为记叙文的一种
辅助的表达方式对加强文章的表现力发挥着重要的作用，它要
求我们善于捕捉细节、刻画
细节，有时还可以用上比喻、拟人、夸张等修辞手法。一篇好的
作文往往因为一两处细节
描写而出彩。
同样地，
议论、
抒情的表
达方式对记叙文主题的展现
也发挥着重要的作用。
一、情感心理描写
在写作中，对人物
情感的描写常常能使人物的形象显得生动鲜活。人的情感可以分很
多种，如喜悦、满意、
失望、悲伤、憎恨、愤怒、惊讶、恐惧、赞赏等等。在英语中有很多
不同的词和句式来表
达这些不同的情感。
?
喜悦
1.
He is very happy and sweet.
他又高兴又甜蜜。
2.
They
didn
’
t know what to do with
themselves for joy.
他们高兴得不知道怎么办
好。
3.
He jumped for
fun.
他高兴得跳了起来。
4.
Her face
brightened up.
她喜形于色。
More examples:
1.
The smile on her face shone like a
diamond.
2.
His
eyes twinkled with pleasure.
3.
I was wild
with joy.
4.
I
was pleased beyond description.
5.
She wore a
shining smile on her face.
6.
Her smile lit
up the whole room.
7.
She shed tears of joy.
8.
She was
overflowing with happiness.
9.
Her flushed
face was shining with excitement.
10.
I was
floating on air.
?
满意
1.
The result is satisfactory.
结果令人满意。
2.
It is
difficult to please everybody.
众口难调。
3.
There is
always a smile of contentment on her face.
她脸上总是挂着心满意足的
微笑。
4.
She belongs to
those who are very difficult to satisfy.
她属于那种极难讨好的
人。
5.
Seeing their
task finished gives them a sense of satisfaction.
看到任务完成
了，他们感到很满意。
?
惊讶
1.
I
’
m surprised to
find you here.
在这里看到你我很奇怪。
2.
It
’
s nothing to
be surprised about.
这不值得大惊小怪。
3.
To my
surprise, he didn
’
t come
yesterday.
令我吃惊的是他昨天没有来。
4.
She looked at
me in amazement.
她惊奇的看着我。
5.
Her appearance
fairly took my breath away.
她的美貌令我神魂颠倒。
6.
Everyone
looked at her in astonishment.
大家都惊讶地看着她。
?
悲伤
1.
He looks so
sad.
他看起来很悲伤。
2.
He is no
stranger to sorrow.
他生活在悲伤中。
3.
His sad story
makes her feel pity.
他的悲惨经历使她深表同情。
4.
His
wife
’
s disease took away his
appetite.
妻子的病令他茶饭不思。
5.
The news
depresses her.
这个消息让她愁苦。
More examples:
1.
He stood silently, tears rolling down
his cheeks.
2.
I
feel like I am floating in an ocean of sadness.
3.
Hearing the
news, so desperate was he that he drowned sadness
in wine.
4.
She
burst into tears and ran out of the room.
5.
She sobbed,
hiding her face in her hands.
6.
I tried to
fight back tears.
7.
My eyes were filled with tears.
8.
A
frown
（皱眉）
now stood on his
face.
9.
These
days he was in low spirits.
?
愤怒
1.
She was
burning with anger.
她怒火中烧。
2.
He easily
loses his temper.
他很容易发脾气。
3.
He was in a
rage.
他大发雷霆。
4.
She was red
with anger.
她因为发怒脸涨得通红。
More examples:
1.
I was seized by anger.
2.
His anger
boiled over.
3.
He could hardly/scarcely contain his
rage.
4.
His
voice trembled with anger.
5.
He gave me a
look of burning anger.
6.
He glared at me with burning eyes.
7.
His face
clouded with anger.
?
感动
1.
Touched deeply/immensely,
we
…
2.
Tears filling her eyes, she offered her
heartfelt gratitude.
3.
With tears streaming down her face,
she...
?
害怕
①
He
turned to me, with his eyes full of horror.
③
She was struck with horror
when...
④
She was choked by
fear.
⑤
Her face turned pale
and stood there tongue-tied.
⑥
Fear flooded over him.
⑦
Her heart beat so violently
that she felt nearly
suffocated
（窒息）
.
⑧
She shook all over, feeling
like sitting on pins and needles.
二、动作描写
动作描写也是描写人的
重要一点。
利用适当的词语对表达人们的心理和性格有很大的帮
助。
?
表达说话的动词：
speak:<
/p>
说，讲，说话，演说。着重开口发音。
say:
说，说话。意义非常广泛，是一般用语。着重内容，指连贯的说话。
talk:
讲，
说
话。
着重说话的动作，
而不着重所说的话。
它多指两个人或多个人在一起讲话。
tell:
说，告诉，讲。指把一件事情传达给别人或讲述一个故事等。有连续叙述的意思。
chat:
闲谈，聊天。多指非正式的，轻松的
，愉快的，没有中心地、没有特殊目的地谈话或
聊天。含有亲热的意味。
1.
gossip:<
/p>
只在后面说人是非，闲谈他人的事情。
2.
Can you child
speak yet?
你的孩子会说话了吗？
3.
He said he
wanted to go to town.
他说他想去城里。
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