中国式英语及地道英语的说法比较

很多国家政府和邮政主管 部门也为中国筹

备本次大会提供了有益的帮助。

在此，

我谨向所有支持本次大会筹备工作的国家、

部门和朋

友们表示最衷心的感谢！

初译：

The Chinese Organizing Committee of the postal Union Congress has gone all out to make

preparations in order to make the Congress a success. The Central Government and the Beijing

Municipal Government of China have rendered unfailing support to the preparatory work of the

Congress. The Governments and competent postal departments of many countries have furnished

kind

assistance

to China's

preparatory

work

for

the Congress. Here

I'd

like

to

express

my

most

sincere

thanks

to

all

countries,

departments

and

friends

that

have

given

us

support

to

the

preparatory work for the Congress.

在这句话中，

大会

，出现了五次，初译在英文中也出现五次。

筹备

一词在汉语中出现三< /p>

次，在英译文中也出现了三次。译文句子非常累赘，有

Ching lish

的味道。

改译：

The COC has gone all out and done a lot of preparatory work for the Postal Union Congress

to

make

it

a

success.

Both

the

Central

Government

and

the

Beijing

Municipal

Government

of

China have rendered unfailing support to its preparations. The Governments and competent postal

departments of many countries have provided China with kind help in the work. Here I wish to

express

most

sincere

thanks

to

all

the

countries,

departments

and

friends

that

have

given

us

support in this regard.

改译后，

大会

和

筹备

都只出现过一次，句子简练一些。

（

6

）

为了推动中美关系的发展，中国需要进一步了解美国，美国也需要进一步了解中国。

初译：

To promote the development of China-US relations, China needs to know the US better and

the US also needs to know China better.

改译：

To promote China-US relations, China needs to know the US better and vice versa.

改后译文避免了重复，英文较顺。

（

7

）

依法治国

……

建立社会主义的法制国家

初译：

govern the country by law…and build the socialist country ruled by law

累赘且费解。

改译：

exercise

the

rule

of

law…and

turn

China

into

a socialist

country

with

an

adequate

legal

system

这样避免出 现两个

，层次比较清楚。

四、过多使用修饰词。汉语中经常用很强的副词修饰动词和形 容词，用形容词修饰名词，以

加重语气。而译成英语时需要斟酌，不能一字一字地照译， 否则往往强调过头，效果相反，

削弱了原文的力量。例如：

（

8

）

我们要继续坚定不移地坚持以经济建设为中心。

我们要继续坚定不移地推进改革开放。

我们要继续坚定不移地保持社会稳定。

我们要继续坚定不移地贯彻执行独立自主的和平外交政策。< /p>

a.

We

will

continue

to

unswervingly

focus

on

economic

development.

We

will

continue

to

unswervingly press ahead with reform and opening-up. We will continue to unswervingly carry

out the independent foreign policy of peace.

b.

We

will

steadfastly

focus

on

economic

development,

resolutely

press

ahead

with

reform

and

opening-up, persistently maintain social stability and unswervingly pursue the independent foreign

policy of peace.

c.

We

will

unswervingly

focus

on

economic

development,

press

ahead

with

reform

and

opening-up, maintain social stability and pursue the independent foreign policy of peace.

四个

“

坚定不移地

”

全译成

unswervingly

，这样的英译文不仅不能加 重语气，反而弱化并显得

累赘。

如果译成不同的副词也不可取，

给人以副词堆砌的感觉。

只用一个副词修饰四个动词