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续写中的环境描写
一、环境描写的素材
环境描写分为客
观和主观两种角度：客观为从环境事物本身入手，主观则从观察者
角度描写。通常在描写时主客观交替进行，主观描写比重稍大。
客观环境描写：
Part
1
环境描写的
adj
要求：有声，有色，有质感，有味道
the
blue
sky(
蓝天）
the
songs
of
birds
（鸟鸣）
the
thundering
clouds
（电光闪雷
鸣）
the
fragile
flowers
(
< br>娇嫩的花）
;
（
the
dark,
raining
evening
雨夜交加的夜晚）
the
green
grass
（青草）
the
fragrant
roses
（艳丽的玫瑰）
;
the
setting/rising
sun(
落
日
/
冉冉升起的太阳）
…
Part
2
环境描写的
verb
（
vi&vt
）要求
Wind
（
blow/click/howl/wail/roar
）
1.
A
gust
of
wind
blew
and
parted
the
drooping
branches
of
the
weeping
willow
like
a
curtain,…
一阵风吹，吹起了弯柳的低垂枝条，就像卷
起的窗帘。
wind,
soft
and
cold,
clicked
through
tree
branches
and
stirred
the
bushes
that
sprinkled
the
slope.
风，轻柔却寒冷，轻点着树枝，搅动着斜坡下的灌木丛。
3.A
cool
breeze
blew
through
the
quiet
park.
凉爽的微风吹拂着寂静的公园。
4.
A
cold
breeze
wafted
through
my
hair.
(
冷风吹拂过我的头发）
5.
The
wind
was
perfect
for
kite
flying,
blowing
just
hard
enough
to
give
some
lift.
（今日正是放风筝的好天气，强劲的风力带动了风筝的上升。）
Water
(flow/trave
l/move/meander/enter)
声音：
1.
A
tone
point,
the
faint
sound
of
water
tumbling
through
the
valley.
在某处，潺潺的水声在山谷中奏响。
颜色
2.
The
water
was
deep
blue
and
sunlight
glittered
on
its
looking
glass-
clear
surface.
水是深蓝色的，阳光在透明的玻璃表面闪闪发光。
3.
A
little
way
off
was
a
small
brook,
rushing
and
sparkling
along
between
green
bank.
离此不远
,
有一条小溪，在绿色的河岸间奔腾闪耀。
4.
It
murmured
in
a
soft
voice
like
a
little
innocent
girl
whispered
to
her
loving
mother.
似
乎
它
在
温
柔
低
语
，
就
一
位
天
真
少
女
对
着
她
那
慈
爱
的
母
亲
细
细
私
语
。
(action,
sound,
colour)
Sky
(stand/
appear/turn)
1.
The
sky
was
a
curdled
gray
burdened
with
lumps
of
clouds.
天空是浓浓的灰色，伴着拥挤的朵朵云
2.
Blue
skies
stood
tall
and
far
蓝蓝的天空高高耸立
主观环境描写：
found
sth
adj/doing/done
某人
发现某物（状态
/
动作
/
被）
...
saw/heard/felt/smelt
sth
doing/done
某人看到
/
听到
/
感到
/
闻到某物（状态
/
动作
/
被）
was
so
adj
that
we
find/feel
它是如此
....
以至于
kept
sb
spellbound/amazed/
景物使我如此陶醉
/
惊讶
/
sth
held
sb
entirely
in
their
power
景物让我完全惊呆了
looked/seemed/appeared/felt
like
…
景物看起来像
…
二、场景描写的素材（来自原著：追风筝的人）
1.
At
least
two
dozen
kites
already
hung
in
the
sky,
like
paper
sharks
roaming
for
prey
.
Within
an
hour,
the
number
doubled
,
and
red,
blue,
and
yellow
kites
glided
and
spun
in
the
sky.
A
cold
breeze
wafted
through
my
hair.
The
wind
was
perfect
for
kite
flying,
blowing
just
hard
enough
to
give
some
lift,
make
the
sweeps
easier.
（放风筝的场景描写，从各个角度，立体描述）
空中已经挂着至少二十来只风筝，如同纸制的鲨鱼，巡游搜猎食物。不到一个钟头，
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这个数字翻了一番，红色的、蓝色的、黄色的风筝在苍穹来回飞舞，熠熠生辉。
寒冷
的微风吹过我的头发。这风正适宜放风筝，风速不大，恰
好能让风筝飘浮起来，也便
于操控。
2.
The
water
was
a
deep
blue
and
sunlight
glittered
on
its
looking
glass-
clear
surface.
湖水澄蓝，波平如镜，阳光照在湖上熠熠生辉。
3.
Then
I
glanced
up
and
saw
a
pair
of
kites,
red
with
longblue
tails,
soaring
in
the
sky.
They
danced
high
above
the
trees
on
the
westend
of
the
park,
over
the
windmills,
floating
side
by
side
like
a
pair
of
eyeslooking
down
onSan
Francisco,
the
city
I
now
call
home.
（场景、比喻）
我抬起头，望见两只
红色的风筝，带着长长的蓝
色尾巴，在天空中冉冉升起。它们舞
动着，飞越公园西边的树林，飞越风车，并排飘浮着，如同一双眼睛俯视着旧金
山，
这个我现在当成家园的城市。
4.
Blue
skies
stood
tall
and
far,
the
sun
l
ike
a
branding
iron
searing
the
back
of
your
neck.
Creeks
where
Hassan
and
I
skipped
stones
all
spring
turned
dry,
and
rickshaws
stirred
dust
when
they
sputtered
by.
（场景、比喻）
天空一碧如洗，阳光像烙铁般灼痛
后颈。整个春天我和哈桑在溪流打水漂，到
了夏天
它们也干涸了。黄包车嗒嗒走过，扬起阵阵灰尘。
5.
Somewhere,
a
branch
snapped,
an
owl
hooted.
The
wind
,
soft
and
cold,
clicked
through
tree
branches
and
stirred
the
bushes
that
sprinkled
the
slope.
And
from
below,
the
faint
sound
of
water
tumbling
through
the
valley.
在某个地方传来树枝劈啪作响的声音，还有猫头鹰的叫声。寒风微微拂动树枝，吹过
山坡上的灌木丛。而下面，水流在山谷淌动，传来阵阵微弱的声音。
6.
By
three
o'clock,
the
rain
had
stopped
and
the
sky
was
a
curdled
gray
burdened
with
lumps
of
clouds.
A
cool
breeze
blew
through
the
park.
（天气）
到三点时，雨停了，铅灰色的天空阴云密布，一阵寒风吹过公园。
7.
The
sun
was
beginning
to
set,
glittering
red
through
the
cracks
between
the
ramshackle
buildings.
（景象）
太阳开始下山，那些摇摇欲坠的房子的裂缝中，渗出闪闪的
红色斜晖
。
读后续写材料
读后续写一
A
farmer
grew
some
vegetables
in
his
garden.
One
day
his
wife
was
ill
and
he
had
no
money.
He
had
to
sell
some
cabbages
and
carrots
in
the
market.
The
next
morning
he
took
two
baskets
of
vegetables
to
town.
But
it
was
raining
hard
that
afternoon
and
there
were
few
people
in
the
street.
When
his
vegetables
were
sold
out,
it
was
dark.
He
bought
some
medicine
and
hurried
to
his
village.
On
his
way
home
he
saw
a
person
lying
on
the
snow.
He
placed
his
baskets
on
the
ground
and
was
going
to
help
the
person
to
get
up.
At
that
time
he
found
it
was
a
dead
man
and
there
was
much
blood
on
his
body.
He
was
so
afraid
that
he
ran
away
quickly,
without
taking
the
baskets
with
him.
The
next
afternoon
the
farmer
was
sent
to
the
police
station.
Having
shown
the
baskets,
an
officer
asked,
“Are
these
yours?”“Yes,
sir.”
the
farmer
answered
timidly.
“Have
you
killed
the
man?”
“No,
no,
sir.”
the
farmer
said
in
a
hurry.
“When
did
you
see
the
dead
man?”
“About
seven
last
evening.”
“Did
you
see
who
killed
the
man?”
“No,
sir.”
The
officer
brought
out
a
knife
and
asked,
“Have
you
seen
it
yet?”
“No,
sir.”
The
officer
became
angry
and
told
the
policemen
to
beat
him
up
and
sent
him
into
prison.
The
officer
wanted
to
trap
the
farmer
into
the
confession,
but
the
farmer
didn’t
admit
he
was
the
murderer.
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Paragraph
1:
The
officer
was
so
angry
that
he
asked
the
policeman
to
beat
him
up
again.
Paragraph
2:
The
farmer
was
lucky
.A
few
days
later,...
Possible
answer:
Paragraph
1
The
officer
was
so
angry
that
he
asked
the
policeman
to
beat
him
up
again.
The
farmer
trembled
with
fear.
At
that
very
moment,
he
wondered
whether
he
would
be
sentenced
to
death
for
killing
people.
“But
I
am
innocent!”
he
reminded
himself
constantly.
He
was
determined
to
tell
people
the
truth,
but
no
one
could
hear
his
voice.
He
hoped
that
maybe
someone
could
come
and
save
him.
Paragraph
2
The
farmer
was
lucky.
A
few
days
later,
a
young
man
came
to
the
police
station,
surrounded
by
a
group
of
journalists,
declaring
that
he
had
spotted
the
murderer.
It
was
the
police
officer
who
killed
the
man
on
the
snow!
He
happened
to
see
the
police
officer
using
a
knife
to
kill
the
man
late
in
the
evening.
He
was
so
frightened
that
he
rushed
away.
So
the
young
man
realized
the
police
had
arrested
the
wrong
person,
and
he
took
the
great
courage
to
expose
the
real
criminal.
After
the
investigation,
the
young
man
was
proved
right
and
eventually
the
police
officer
was
sent
into
prison.
On
hearing
the
news,
the
poor
farmer
burst
into
tears.
The
brave
young
man
was
regarded
as
the
hero
by
the
villagers.
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