三日游美国大学英语写作

，我觉得还是因为我的想法好。可见，选一个独特的角度

是多么重要。

(2).

有一个清晰、

开门见山的好 开头也很重要

，

我是指对于读后感这类文章。

< br>因为一开头你

必须要

summerize

故事的内容，还要明确提出

Thesis Statement

，所以要求还是很高的。

下面给出我写的开头，大家可以参考一下：

During the stage of early adolescence when hormonal changes occur rapidly, there’s

always confusion about gender, along with attraction about the sex.

(

由一个现象，引出

我要说的内容，不至于突兀

)

In Bernard Cooper’s essay “A Clack of Tiny Sparks:

Remembrances of a Gay Boyhood”, he writes about the struggle of recognizing and

defining his own sexual identity as an adolescent.

(

一定要高度凝练地概括你读了谁的 什么

书，一句话总结文章内容

)

Theresa Sanchez, a mature

and unique girl in Cooper’s class,

plays a very important role in helping Cooper realize and accept the fact that he is gay. (

引

character)

< br> The creation of the character Theresa in the

essay is so artful, for she not only serves as the transition from one episode to another, but

she is also like a guide in disguise, leading Cooper toward the right direction at some

critical points during his painful struggle. Throughout the essay, Theresa just reflects

another personality of the author, guiding him to fulfill his self-discovery on

homosexuality.

(

这是我整个文章的

Thesis S tatement

，一定要在开头段说清楚，而且要说

的全面< /p>

)

(3).

最大的教训是写这类文章不要代入自己的主观情感< /p>

（

！！！

）。千万不要说你喜不喜欢

这个

character

，因为没有人关心 这个。读者只关心你是怎么去阐释这个角色的，你是如何

自圆其说的，你是如何赋予这个 角色一层新的认知的。而且，不要自作多情地

“

以小代大

”

，

意思是千万不要用

“We”

，因为你可不能保证其他人是不是和你想的一样，用

We

来说话，

是很冒犯人的。下面来看我文章的结尾，是一个赤 果果的反面教材，大家就当教训了：

Personally, I like this character very much.

(

首先就犯了大忌！谁在意你是不是喜欢这个角< /p>

色呢！别加入自己的情感！

)

Despite the lack of basic facts about Theresa, this character is

successfully and vividly established through her interactions with Cooper. We could feel as

if Theresa has come to life, instead of a rigid figure in a story that we can’t resonate

with.

(

谁跟你想的一样啊真是自作多情！记住，

Never use “We” in an essay!!!)

As

Cooper’s guide in disguise, Theresa let Cooper confront his sexua

lity face to face by asking

him “Are you a fag” at first, and after his failed experiment about the opposite sex, Theresa

gave him justifications and confidence that ultimately led to the completion of his

self-discovery on his sexual identity. Had it not been for her guidance at some critical

points, Cooper wouldn’t have survived his painful struggle with his identity and honestly

accepted his homosexuality in the end. Theresa is the thread of the whole story, an

“invisible hand” that artfully manipulates the development of Cooper’s essay, a crucial

character that leaves so deep an impression on the audience that we couldn’t shake it out

of our heads.

(

又犯了大忌，唉，当时我还无知

)

?

第二篇：

Reflective Narrative

也就是写一个

Personal Story

< br>，一件发生在你生命中的故事。个人感觉这篇比较好写，只要

想好了要写啥故事， 那就不愁了，直接信手拈来了。这篇文章个人发挥的余地就比较大了，

想写什么就写什么 ，

不过文章还是要有中心论点的，

以及叙述要生动，

就跟读小说似的。这篇文章我得了

< br>A+

并且老师的评论是

Excellent job

。所以我也分享一些

我写文章的经验，以及说几点我在这文章中得到 的教训吧，我感觉很受用：

(1).

一定要注意句子和句子之间 的内在逻辑，在一篇文章里，没有一句话应该是白说的，

它一定是服务于某个目的的

。

有时我会犯懒，

直接说一个现象，

然后就得出了一个结论，

因

为我实在懒得说过 程了。

可是读者都有精明的双眼，

他们可是不会放过你逻辑上的 一点点不

合理的地方。

你一定要对你说的每一句话负责

，因为你想敷衍而过的东西，读者就会像纠

住把柄一样不放过。

他们会提很多细小的问题，不断在质疑，

直到你能自圆其说为止。

这一

点我在

Peer Critique

的时候深有体会。这帮

Peers

一定要我 把每件事情都说清楚啊！累死

姐了好么！

不过现在看来，这真的 是个好习惯，也能证明你是一个头脑清晰，负责任的好作

者。下面来看我写的一段话，括 号里是我的

Peer

，一个叫

Hele ne

的姑娘的质疑：

I have to say I was a very spoiled kid in my childhood. Brought up by my grandparents in

a suburban area in Beijing, I was no doubt the apple in their eyes. My grandparents, with

the most loving hearts on earth

（

How can you tell

？

Any Example

？）

, treated me with extra

love and care lest I felt slightly unhappy. They never blamed me when I did wrongs things,

and with this indulgence which I took for granted, I grew more and more self-centered and

wayward. At school, I was not a hard-working type of person, but all classes seemed really

easy to me.

Why

？

You are smarter than others or your classes are too easy

？）

Teachers

liked me because I could always get full points in exams. Classmates liked me because I

could play the piano and accordion pretty well.

（

How does “playing an instrument” relate

to “your classmates liked you”

？

Any relationship between these two

？

Or your classmates

like music-oriented students

？

Explain.

）

And my neighbors always praised me with the

biggest smiles ever when they saw me on the streets and told their kids to “learn from

si

ster Tong.”

（

Why they did that

？

Why they praised you

？）

It seemed that I was the real

model that parents set for their children in our district. All of these became my secret pride,

which is not even worth mentioning when I looked back, but at that time, it was something

powerful enough to float my boat

（

Avoid cliché!)

and make an eight-year-old child quite

proud and conceited.