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2015-12-23

2015“外研社杯”全国英语写作大赛

议论文赛题

Can being positive backfire

？

Optimism provides a multitude of benefits across many facets of life.

Researchers have linked looking on the bright side to everything from

improved pain tolerance to increased longevity. There’s nodenying the

incredible power an optimistic outlook can have on our health,

relationships,

and

performance.

But

like much

in

life,

it

is

possible

to

have too much of a good thing. There are some cases when an overly

optimistic outlook can do more harm than good.

Suppose there is an online discussion forum on the topic “C

an being

positive backfire?” Write a post to the forum, clearly stating your

opinion

and

supporting

your

ideas

with

specific

reasons

and

examples.

You

should write about 800 words.

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选手解题思路

拿到题目之后，我足足 看了三遍题目中的文本信息。其中，提到了两点：一是

being positive

；二是

being overly positive

。我自己的想法就是折中。

然后，

开头明确提出自己的观点再以一个详例子和三个短例子对所持观点进行适

当佐证。接着回到文本信息中的

overly

positive

，对其提出反对和批评，并选

取一个 例子进行佐证，证明为什么要反对

overly positive

。

最后是对整体的总结，明确表达自己对题目

“Can being positiv

e

backfire

？”的看法。

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注：

文章为从系统摘出的原生作品，

目的是为了展现出选手三个小时内的写作风

貌，可能存在部分拼写错误，仅供学习分享使用。

Emotions are miscellaneous, such as optimism and pessimisism; merriment

and sorrow; excitement and despondency;... Human beings are inherently

.

emotional and emotions do play a significant role in our actions and

attitudes. We may encounter some personal tragedies or sufferings, but

the actions and attitudes we take might differ. For example, being

moderately positive means that we can keep a sanguine outlook on our

experience; means that we can transmute the negative feelings into a

positive attitude towards our frustration; means that we can look the

unpleasant matters in a positive light and tackle them with great

resilience.

Personally,

I

espouse

bing

a

moderately

positive

individual.

Hellen Keller, who was blind and deaf, became a celebrated writers with

unflagging

belief

in

herself

and

unyielding

willpower.

In

front

of

Hellen

Keller,

there

lied

two

options:

either

live

live

to

its

fullest

or

wither

away

like

the

autumn

leaves.

Instead

of

capitulating

to

the

sheer

darkness

and silence, she harbored prodigious fortitude to vanquish the personal

trageies and sufferings. Under the assistance of her teacher Anne, she

learnt Braille and writing. After reading a sea of books, Hellen Keller

soaked

up

all

the

quintessence

and

wisdom

of

other

writers

and attempted

to write her own.

The spirit

of

never being pessimistic sustained

her in

the most darkest hours of her life and she rose like a shinging star in

the

firmament

of

writing.

Her

teacher

also

held

a

positive

belief

in

Hellen

so she resolved to help Hellen face life positively.

There are innumerable other examplars of being moderately positive.

Thomas Edison, by dint of a postive mindset and unwavering pursuit,

invented

the

most

endurable

and

suitable

material

to

make

the

incandescent

bulb which marked the inauguration of the electrical era. Madame Curie,

by virtue of a optimistic attitude and steadfast tenacity, extracted an

infinitesimal amount of radium from tons of impure materials after

three- year-and-nine-month experiment and advocated to use radioisotope

to

cure

cancer

which

rendered

humanity

a

powerful

weapon

to

fight

against

the fatal disease. Hua Luogeng, a renowned Chinesesmethematician,

metamorphosed into a math master by holding a positive outlook and

unswerving doggedness.

It's

not

hard

to

find

the

common

denominator

of

the

brilliant

and

reverent

giants: a positive outlook towards the sufferings and failures.

Being moderately positive will arm us with an effective weapon to repel

the enemies of negative feelings that will hold us back and become a

stumbling block on the way ahead. It will bolster up our belief and

confidence in the face of the mishaps and torments and we will possess

a more optimistic perspective to the life tragedies. Being moderately

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positive

is

like

a

beacon

light

of

hope

which

will

illuminate

our

way

ahead

and

resembles

a

lighthouse

which

show

us

the

path

when

we

are

disoriented.

Then all the darkness will fade away and crumble into dust. Being

moderately positive is the inner force which propels you froward in the

teeth

of

setback

and hurdles.

We

will

ooze

confidence

and

persistence

no

matter how tough the situation is.

Nevertheless,

we

are

supposed

to

put

the

positive

mindset

in

perspective,

which means we need to understand it in the appropriate and right way.

Here the positive mindset is a moderately positive one, not overly

optimistic.

Anything

that

is

too

much

will

backfire.

The

last emperor

of

Shang

Dynasty

was

being

too

sanguine

and

optimistic

and

believed

that

his

kingdom was impregnable and was never to be toppled by others. Thus he

sank

into

the

debauched

and

promiscuous

lifestyle,

listened

to

the

malign

suggestions

of

his

diabolical

officers

and

precluded

any

good

suggestions

from

being

sent

to

him.

The

decadence

and

depravity

eventually

led

to

his

downfall and his power was nullified and compromised. This renders us a

good

lesson

that

we

shall

never

become

overly

optimistic

about

our

lives,

works,

conditions

and

circumstances

because

undue

and

inordinate

optimism

led

to

the

complacent

and

smug

mentality.

It

is

always

counterproductive.

Individuals should always strive for the better selves rather than rest

and wallow in self-contentment when the achievements are made. That is

why being overly optimistic should be deprecated and criticized.

So, what we need to do is to differentiate the positive mind from the

overly-optimistic

one,

for

there

is

a

blurry

line

between

these

two.

Our

capacity

to

distinguish

between

them

must

be

acuqired

by

constant

failures

and attempts. Always being moderately positive is not an easy task and

trying to keep it is even much harder. Sometimes we will become

disheartened and lose all the hope; sometimes we will enjoy the

exhilaration of being successful and then get obsessed with the current

achievements.

Through

failures,

we

can

have

a

much

clearer

interpretation

of being moderately postive. And this is a long process that should be

covered step by step and brick by brick.

Can

being

positive

backfaire?

I

cannot

answer

in

the

affirmative.

But

add

to

the

sentence:

Can

being

moderately

positive

backfire?

My

answer is definitely NO.

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对于议论文来说，

审题永远都是重 中之重。

而其实审题也是最具趣味性的，

品味

< br>题目的引导性，

琢磨关键词带来的启发。

这篇议论文的题 目恰恰就是这种非常吸

引人的类型。读到疑问句的标题“Can

being

positive

ba ckfire?”让人耳目一

新。

通常提到乐观主义，