新高考英语读后续写高分作文实用高级句型专练四(原文+范文+学案)

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In 2013,I was struggling.I was diagnosed with morbid obesity(

病态性肥

胖

).Even though I exercised regularly and went on a diet, I couldn't lose

weight. Meanwhile, I faced a reduction in pay and financial hardship for

numerous

challenges

forced

me

to

reevaluate

my

opportunities. Therefore, great changes to my life began to unfold.

I began investing more in my family than I had in the past. My son

had

started

playing

hockey,

which

was

a

fairly

new

sport

in

our

Midwestern city. I saw an opportunity to have an athletic bond with my

son, so I picked up my own hockey stick and started playing with him.

Then

I

was

presented

with

the

opportunity

to

have

bariatric

surgery(

减重手术

).

I

was

actually

a

very

active

person.

I

was

always

working out. As a former marathon runner, I never stopped running long

distances. Playing sports has always been a part of my life. Regardless of

the exercise, I still struggled with my weight; it was in my DNA. I just

wanted something to

make

it

a little

easier.

Hopefully,

bariatric surgery

was the answer.

As

for

my

career,

after

a nationwide

search

and

sending out many

resumes,

I

received

several

offers,

but

none

seemed

just

right

until

an

opportunity

came

with

a

job offer in

southern

California.

This

was

just

one month after my surgery,I headed west and prepared to take advantage

of my new life. There I worked in the University of Southern California

as

a

teaching

assistant.I

had

always

wanted

to

attend

graduated

school,

but I always put it off in order to pour myself into my job. Then I caught

the

opportunity

to

study

and

applied

for

the

Executive

Master

of

Leadership

program.

I

was

accepted!

I

was

so

honored

by

the

opportunity.

Paragraph 1

Apart

from

my

work

and

study,I

used

the

opportunity

for

multi-tasks.

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I joined the hockey team while studying at university.

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文章分析和写作指导

1.

主旨大意。

这篇文章主要叙述的是主人公“我”的遭遇。在

2013

年 ，

“我”被诊断为病态性肥胖，即便是“我”经常运动也不能减重，

同时，

“我”的工作遇到问题，经济困难。面对一系列的挫折，

“我”

积极面对，

“我”开始和“我”儿子一起进行曲棍球 练习，也做了减

重手术，同时，练习马拉松跑步，同时获得一份大学的助教工作，而

且还攻读研究生学位。

2.

续写思路。

原文介绍了在

“我”

遇到困难之后从事了一系列的活动，< /p>

段首语第一段介绍说除了工作和学习，

“我”还利用机会做“我” 的

多项任务。第二段段首语介绍说“我”参加了曲棍球队，同时在大学

< br>学习。因此，结合前文，第一段内容应该是“我”的工作学习以及马

拉松运动等活 动的情况。第二段应该是“我”的曲棍球和儿子的曲棍

球训练情况以及“我”在大学的学 习情况。从原文“我”们可以的得

知，在面对困难的时候，

“我 ”是积极面对的，因此，努力必定有收

获，在文章的结尾可以描写“我”的成就。

3.

写作风格。

注意语言、动作、心理、情感等细节描绘。尝试使用动

词、形容 词、定语从句、名词性从句、状语从句、非谓语动词以及被

动语态来刻画人物的语言、动 作、心理、神态以及环境氛围。注意运

用恰当的代词、逻辑衔接词把句子连接成文。

4.

评分标准 。

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与所给短 文融合

度高，与所提供的各段落开头语衔接合理。

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