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2009
年考研英语真题作文
【篇一：考研英语短文写作
09
年真题分析
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含评分标准
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考研英语短文写作十年真题分析
第十节
2009
年
section
iii writing
2009
年考研英语考试结束了。今年走出考场的考生普遍感觉今年的
试题较往年难度有所降低
，尤其是写作部分两道题目难度适中，大
家基本发挥出了正常水平。下面针对小作文和大
作文分别给予点评，
并提供阅卷的范文供大家参考。
part a
51.
directions:
一．审题构思
小作文去年考的道歉信，
09
年小作文要求写一封建议信。
今年的建
议信相比
07
年的建议信要求
更加具体，且话题更为熟悉。考生对这
个话题可写的东西比较多。且在平时大作文的训练
中考生都接触过
不少表达观点看法和提出建议的方法，尤其在环境保护方面的建议
措施接触的更多，因此这篇小作文题材大家非常熟悉，难度适中。
如果
同学在考前临阵抱佛脚，只要把建议信的套话背下来，比如建
议信的第一句话怎么写，中
间怎么写，最后一句怎么结尾，直接把
有关内容换成白色污染即可。
二．框架思路
确切地讲，今年的小作文仍然是没有脱离开过去的老套，又是
一封
信，而这封信对同学们来讲，是我们很熟悉的白色塑料袋的使用问
< br>题。有很多商家为了争取自己定期的常客，他们可能会想到促销的
手段或者销售的
途径，那就是说送给你塑料袋，方便你使用。但是
这些顾客们可能有些人是懂得或者说环
保意识很强的，有些塑料袋，
他们总是重复地去用；可是有一些不尽然，像年轻人这样，
用过后
就扔掉。谈到了白色污染这个话题，就想给编辑写封信，信中反映
的是你对这个现象的一个看法，之后，你应该提出一些解决的措施，
所以这封信
里面要讲的话一点都不难写，最重要的是我们要做一个
对社会有责任的人，因为只有如此
我们才能够用我们的心去感知这
个社会的问题，才能真正从我们内心想出一些方法，使我
们的社会
更加洁净，这样才能更加和谐。
本文可以按三段处理，首段直接谈白色污染的情况，中段讲出
解决
问题的建议和措施，最后再次提醒编辑关注此事刻不容缓，并加强
< br>礼貌语气。
三．参考范文
dear
editor(s),
i am
writing this letter to draw your attention
to“white
pollution”. no one can avoid
using plastic bags in ou
r daily
lives and too to address this problem,
i would like to lodge
several
suggestions. on the one hand, the authorities
should
set up rules and many plastic
bags bring about many problems.
how to
solve this problem has become a hot issue among
many people in recent years.
regulations to control the
production
and circulation of the plastic bags. on the other
hand, people should realize the
significant of protecting our
environment and not use too many
plastic bags.
方面，人们应该意识到保护环境
的重要性并不使用太多的塑料袋。
四．文章点评：
< br>范文为缩进格式。由于本信函属于公务信件，题目提供的名字就是
编辑，所以要按
较正式的口吻来写作，文章开始的称呼为
dear
editor
，语气就比较正式。
第一段开门见山，使用
draw
your attention to
结构直接表示请求
关注。
首段使用了
and
连接两个并列句的信息。语法上，最后一句<
/p>
使用了
how
to
引出的名词短语作为主语，点明了文章的中心。
第二段承上启下，按议论文模式设定了段首句，提出的两种方
案用
on the one
hand
和
on the other hand
灵活列出。本段中，动词
address
和
lodge
较有特色。
第三段中，作者再次请求关注。按照信函写作
“
感谢客气不能少
”
的
原则，应连续两次使用传达礼貌的句型。
五．阅卷样文
五档：
9
分
dear editor,
i’m a sincere reader of your newspaper
and i like your
discussion of the
social problems. now i want to give some
opinions of as we know, regulation was
made to solve the
problem in june 1st
of 2008. the use of plastic bags was
restricted in the myself about the
“white pollution”.
supermarket and many
other shops freely. at the beginning, it
was carried on well, but now i found
plastic bags were used in
some small
shops for free or with no pay.
i am writing to tell you that we
should solve this problem
soon with the
help of your newspaper. you could make some
sincerely, li ming investigators about
it and write some reports
of it, so as
to appeal to all the pe
ople’s
attentions of our
society.
我真诚地希望您能认真对待我的信。感谢您拨冗关注。
您
诚挚的
李明
评语
：本文很好地完成了试题规定的任务，与目标读者完全产生了
预期的效果：
1
．内容包含了所有的内容要点，该文第一段的
内容更吻合题目的要
求。
2
．所使用的语法结构和词汇比较丰富。
3
．语言比较自然流畅，尽管存在个别的语法（例如，时态）
和用词
错误。
4
．有效使用了各种衔接手段，层次清晰，组织也比较严密。
5
．格式与语域恰当贴切。
dear editor wang,
time.
i
believe there are ways to improve the situation.
our
communities could offer bags free,
which will substitute
plastic bags.
meanwhile, some education on environment and
white pollution should be held to local
people. besides the
above two, much
more can be done. i hope you would
consider it carefully.
yours truly li ming i am a senior
student living in beijing.
being a
citizen in our capital, i care a lot about our
environment.
but, although the law of
not using plastic bags had been
enforced since june, the effect is not
very good. i am afraid
“white
pollution” will still exist for a long
评语：较好地完成了试题规定的任务，基本能够对目标读者产
生预
期的效果：
1.
包含了所有的内容要点，既简要介绍了自己的观点，又提出了具
体的建议。
2.
所使用的句子结构和词汇相对比较丰富，例如：
being a
citizen
in……, i
care……
等。
3.
语言基本正确，当然也存在着一些语法错误和用词的错误，但是
并不会严
重影响意义的表达。
4.
采用了适当的衔接手段，例如
, but,
meanwhile,
besides
等，层
次也比较清晰。
5.
格式和语域比较恰当。
三档：
5-6
分
to whom it may
concern:
as a student of a
university, i want to take this opportunity to
express some points about “white
pollution”. there is no
denying that
plastic is destroy our environment is we use it
excessively. so the government take
some means to deal with
it. restrict to
use the plastic bags in whole country. but it
didn’t
get successful as we predict.
the “white pollution” is still
around
our environment in some regions.
takes measures is needed. i want to
take some recommends.
first and
formost, more strength restriction is needed by
pollution education. second, media
should spread more
information concern.
only in this way can we curb the
statement. i’m looking forward
your reply.
sincerely yours liming
评语：基本完成了试题规定的任务，对目标读者基本产生了预期的
效果：
1.
内容包含试题所要求的两个要点，没有跑题。
2.
具有较多的用词与语法错误，但是读者仍然能够大致领
会作者想
要表达的意思。
3.
采用了一些简单的衔接手段，内容还算连贯，层次也算清楚。
4.
格式和语域基本合理。
i am very sorry to trouble with you.
but this is a problem
annoying with me.
it is white pollution. with the economic
growth widely, white pollution become
more and more serious.
it is harmonious
between the men and nature. white pollution
destroy some special. more and more
similar issue can be
read today in
newspaper as well as in magazine.
the problem can be solved in some
ways. first, attitude is
everything. we
must make people aware of this issue. second,
we must change with ourself. it’s
essential that we address our
problem
before looking to others change. finally, the acts
of
pollution must be
punishment.
i’m
looking forward to your reply! yours sincerely li
ming
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