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Academic Writing
Task 2
IELTS
Writing
Task2
评分标准解析
?
Band 8
description
–
Task Response
?
Length
?
Address
all questions directly
?
Clear position and well developed
–
Coherence and
Cohesion
?
Cohesive devices
?
Clear
progression
?
Clear central topic
–
Lexical
Resource
?
Use a wide range
of vocabulary
?
Skillfully use uncommon items
?
Error free
–
Grammatical
Range and Accuracy
?
Use a
wide range of structures
?
Error free
Task2
评分标准解析
?
LR
得分对策
?
避免口语词汇
?
always; very; a lot of
?
避免表意不明
?
new things; bad things
?
避免使用使役动词
?
make sth adj.
?
避免意译
?
starting places; cut out
Writing Task 2
分类突破
?
雅思写作话题分类
–
R
eport
【报告型】
?
Reasons
?
Influences
?
Measures
–
A
rgumentation
【论证型】
?
Opinions
?
Evidences
首段写法
?
贫富差距:
–在当今社会,
贫富差距很普遍并且越来越明显。
这种状况如果得不到有效的解
决将会给社会带来各种问题。
本文将探讨贫富差距产生的原因并提出相应
的解
决方案。
?
国际旅游
–当前,
出国旅游现在已经非常普遍并且人们在旅游过程中了解
的异国文化。
这
种国家之间的了解对国际关系将产生重大影响。
本文将探讨国际旅游受欢迎的
主要原因以及对个人与社会的影响
。
?
环境污染:
–在
21
世纪,人类面临着严峻的环境问题。这个问题如果没有得到有效的控制,
会威胁人类的生存。
在本文中,
我将探讨环境
污染的主要原因并提出有效的解
决方案。
首段写法
?
贫富差距:
–
In the contemporary
societies, the gap between the rich and the poor
is
prevalent and becoming increasingly
obvious. If this situation is not
addressed effectively, it will give
rise to a variety of social problems. In
this essay. I will look into the
reasons for the wealth gap and bring forth
corresponding solutions.
首段写法
?
国际旅游
–
In recent years,
international travel has been increasingly popular
across
the world and the tourists
learn about the distinctive cultures from their
own
through
traveling. Such understanding between people has
significantly affected the
international relations. In this essay, I will
investigate about the reason for
increase of international tourists and
analyze the effects on individuals and
the society.
首段写法
?
环境问题
–
In the 21st century, the
human race is facing grave environmental
condition than any previous times. If
the trend is not reversed, the
survival
of human being will be in risk. In this essay, I
will elaborate on
the causes of
environmental damages and put forward
corresponding
solutions.
首段写法
?
贫富差距:
–
在当今社会,
贫富差距很普遍并且越来越明显。
这种状况如果
得不到有效的解
决将会给社会带来各种问题。
本文将探讨贫富差
距产生的原因并提出相应的解
决方案。
?
国际旅游
–
当前,
出国旅游现在已经非常普遍并
且人们在旅游过程中了解的异国文化。
这
种国家之间的了解对国
际关系将产生重大影响。
本文将探讨国际旅游受欢迎的
主要原因
以及对个人与社会的影响。
?
环境污染:
–
在
21
世纪,人类面临着严峻的环境问题。这个问题如果没有
得到有效的控制,
会威胁人类的生存。
在本文中,
我将探讨环境污染的主要原因并提出有效的解
决方案。
首段写法
–
According to
one recent survey
, the number of
private cars in
Beijing has increased
by 20% to 2 million and
it is difficult
to
foresee any downward
trend
.
–
THESIS
STATEMENT
–
This
ever-swelling car ownership
in many big
cities as well as
countryside is
causing
numerous problems
.
–
It
is
reported
that
the
world
is
facing
a
worsening
youth
employment crisis: young people are
three times more likely to
be
unemployed
than
adults
and
over
75
million
youth
worldwide are looking for work.
–
THESIS STATEMENT
–
The
impacts
of
the
situation
should
be
given
adequate
attention.
–
Proving surprising facts: statistics
–
According
to
a
recent
survey,
more
than
70%
of
the
……
–
It is reported that ......
–
An
authoritative
magazine
concerning
…
reveals
that
…
–
In
a
study
conducted
by
the
Medical
Association,
researchers
concluded that
…
–
Practice:
–
The dying out
of species
–
Surprising statement: from experts or
researches
–
…, as educationalists suggests / points
out /
advises
–
Studies have shown that / proven that
…
–
… (facts) ….
Some experts draw the conclusion
that
……
?
Practice:
–
Noise pollution
–
Long
term
exposure
in
noise
could
lead
to
serious
physical
disorders
or
even
fatal
disease,
as
medical
experts
advises
/
cautions / suggests.
–
THESIS
STATEMENT
–
They
also prompt the government to identify the sources
of
noise and to take effective actions
to reduce noise.
–
Noise
pollution
adversely
affects
the
lives
of
millions
of
people. Studies have shown
that there are direct links between
noise
and
health.
Problems
related
to
noise
include
hearing
loss, sleep
disruption, low productivity and so on, among
which
Hearing Loss is the most common.
–
THESIS
STATEMENT
–
These
health
hazards
can
only
be
eliminated
though
identifying the main
sources and the measures to reduce noises.
?
Sample:
–
In recent decades, an
increasing number of museums and
galleries have been built in my
countries, most of which are
equipped
with the latest technology and advanced
facilities. What
is the function of
such places and who should be responsible for
financing such places?
?
Most teens have money to spend thanks
to an allowance
or after-school job,
but do they have the money
management
skills to go along with that income?
Therefore some people suggest that we
should teach
children about financial
management at an early age.
?
It
is known to all that noise can be annoying, but
are you
aware of the fact that the
impacts of noise on our
health can be
appalling?
THESIS STATEMENT
To alleviate the hazardous
effects, it is critical to identify
the
main sources of noise and take necessary
measures to reduce noise pollution.
?
?
?
素材梳理:
–
[C7T3 Page 167] WRITING
TASK 2
–
As most people
spend a major part of their adult life at work,
job
satisfaction
is an important element of individual wellbeing.
–
What factors
contribute to job satisfaction?
–
How realistic is the
expectoration of job satisfaction for all workers?
Report
主体段结构
?
考官范文赏析:
–
Body 1
?
“Employees get
job satisfaction
in a number of
ways.
”
–
Firstly
, feel the work is
valued and valuable and feel the job is
worth doing
–
Secondly
, a sense of
progression
–
The sense of belonging
also
contribute
to …
–
Satisfaction is
also
increased by a sense of
responsibility
Report
主体段结构
?
素材梳理:
–
[
环境资源类
] Far too little has
been done to prevent animals and
plants
from dying out, although people have noticed this
problem for a
long time. Why are people
failed to improve this situation? What are
your suggestions?
Report
主体段结构
?
素材梳理:
–
Page 228 Reasons and
solutions for juvenile crime.
Report
主体段结构
?
素材梳理:
–
Page 246 Reasons and
solutions to water shortage
Report
主体段结构
?
素材组织:
–
[
环境资源类
] Far too little has
been done to prevent animals and
plants
from dying out, although people have noticed this
problem for a
long time. Why are people
failed to improve this situation? What are
your suggestions?
Report
主体段结构
?
素材组织(平民版):
–
首
先
?
First of all;
to begin with; first
–
其
次
?
In addition;
besides; in addition to
–
再
次
?
Moreover;
wh
at’s more
Report
主体段结构
?
素材组织(砖家版):
–
Reasons
[
主要次要;直接间接
]
?
一个主要原因是
–
T
he
major / main / prime cause
is that
…
?
另一个因素是
–
T
he
other contributing factor
involves
…
?
….
也不能被忽略
–
I
n addition, …
should not be ignored
Report
主体段结构
?
素材组织(砖家版):
–
Measures
[
有效性
]
?
一个有效解决方案是
…
?
One effective approach
to solve the problem is …
?
此外,
…
也是一个可行的选择。
?
Besides, to do
… is
also a feasible choice.
?
如果能
…,
问题也能得到极大的解决
?
Provided that
… can be done, this issue
could be
largely improved.
Report
主体段结构
?
素材组织(专家版):
Report
主体段结构
?
素材组织(专家版):
–
The first reason is
associated with the mass media, whether it is
print media such as newspaper or
magazine or the electronic
media
including the internet or TV, where the readers or
audiences are bombarded with
fashionable content.
–
However, whether to buy
something fashionable is ultimately
determined by we individuals, or more
exactly, consumers.
–
Therefore, some
consideration should be given to the buyer
themselves.
Report
主体段结构
?
素材组织(专家版):
Report
主体段结构
?
素材组织(专家版):
–
Many people suggest that
the failure of family education may be
to
blame.
–
Due to the fact that young
children spent the major part of time in
school
–
educationalists also point
out that there is a problem with school
education as well.
Report
主体段结构
?
素材组织(专家版):
–
To reduce juvenile crime,
first of all, parents should regulate
children’s behavior and instill correct
view of life.
–
Though educating about
right and wrong can reduce crime in the
long run, to halt the current trend of
juvenile crime, children
should develop
clear recognition about the consequences of
inappropriate behaviors, where schools
are in the best position to
implement
the solution.
–
Schools should incorporate legal education into
the elementary
curriculum.
Report
主体段结构
?
素材组织(专家版):
–
C8 Page 167
solution to traffic and pollution
–
I think to
tackle the problem of pollution, cleaner fuels
need to be developed. …
–
However,
traffic congestion will not be solved by
changing the type of private vehicle
people can use. To
do this, we need to
improve the choice of public transport
services available to travellers.
…
Task 2
论据扩展方法
?
论据扩展:
–
[
环境资源类
] Far too little has
been done to prevent animals and
plants
from dying out, although people have noticed this
problem for a
long time. Why are people
failed to improve this situation? What are
your suggestions?
Task 2
主体段落扩展
?
主体段落论据扩展:
–
The main reason
is that a large proportion of people lack
the awareness of protecting the
endangered species.
Task 2
主体段落扩展
?
主体段落论据扩展:
–
The main reason
is that a large proportion of people lack
the awareness of protecting the
endangered species.
?
Why so?
【给出原因】
?
Really?
【给出具体事例】
Task 2
主体段落扩展
?
主体段落论据扩展:
–
the main reason is that a
large proportion of people lack the
awareness of protecting the endangered
species.
?
[
解释原因
] Many
people assume that there is no direct relation
beween
the living of those plants and
animals and ours.
?
[
解释后果
] As a
result, people seldom see the necessity and the
significance to invest heavily on
protection, due to which many species
become extinct.
Task 2
主体段落扩展
?
主体段落论据扩展:
–
The other contributing
factor involves the economic development.
–
[
解释原因
] Economic growth is
invariably accompanied by taking resources
from the nature such as cutting down
woods in the forest, and discharging
waste and pollutant into the nature.
–
[
解释后果
] In this process, the
habitats of many species are destroyed.
–
[
举例说明
] Taking chemical
industry for example, as it contributes to the
overall national economy, the toxic
water and other substances, which were
discharged without being treated, have
been the main cause of extinction of
some aquatic lives.
Task 2
主体段落扩展
?
主体段落论据扩展:
–
People tend to give
priority to economic development rather than
species
conservation.
–
[
解释原因
] Generally speaking,
ecomomic benefits are the primary concern
of people, while protecting endangered
species demands tremendous
amount of
resources and produced limited values.
–
[
解释后果
]Accordingly, being
confronted with the choices, most would
choose to develop the economy at the
expenses of some species.
Task 2
主体段落扩展
?
主体段落论据扩展:
–
To improve the
current situation, the government need to
launch educational program to inform
the public about
the significance of
protecting endangered species.
–
How
to do that?
【
C8T3
】
–
Is that
effective?
Task 2
主体段落扩展
?
主体段落论据扩展:
–
For example,
schools can open courses concerning
environmental protection, and the
government can
broadcast educational
contents through the mass media
to the
public. In this way, people will becoming
increasing
aware of
the living condition of endangered
species
and take necessary actions.
Task 2
主体段落扩展
?
论点表述:
–
[20081023] Many people use
distance-learning programs (study
material post
,
TV<
/p>
,
internet etc.) to study at
home
,
but some people
think that it can not bring the benefit
as much as attending
college or
university.
–
Discuss both views and gives your opinion.
?
远程学习
?
上大学(在学校学习)
?
讨论双方观点并给出自己的观点
Task 2
主体段落扩展
?
[Task 2
真题练习
]
–
Many people use distance-
learning programs (study material post
,
TV
,
internet etc.)
to study at home
,
but some
people think that it can
not bring the
benefit as much as attending college or
university.
–
Discuss both views and gives your opinion.
Task 2
主体段落扩展
?
[Task 2
真题练习
]
–
[TS]
One obvious advantage for students
going to
university is that
studying in university may contribute
to enhancing the students’
communicative abilities.
?
在学校学习一个最大的优势在于
…
?
大学学习
对
提高学生的交流能力
有益
。
Task 2
主体段落扩展
?
[Task 2
真题练习
]
–
[Ss]
This is primarily / mainly
because
?
这主要是因为
…
–
students living
on the university campus will be able to
get plenty of opportunities to
communicate with different
people,
such as
their roommates,
classmates and tutors.
Task
2
主体段落扩展
?
[Task 2
真题练习
]
–
[Ss]
For
example, when
–
students have problems
about their studies, they may try to get a clear
understanding of the question by
communicating and discussing with
their
professors. In the process, students will be able
to acquire the
skills of communication.
–
[Ss]
By contrast, if
–
students stay
at home, learning through distance learning
programs,
they may be deprived of the
opportunity to communicate with their
peers and teachers.
Task 2
主体段落扩展
?
[Task 2
真题练习
]
–
[Ss]
From the analysis above, it is clear
that
?
由以上的分析,可以看出
…
–
attending university will benefit the
students involved in
terms of
communicative skills, which are essential for
their future careers.
–
[150 words]
Task 2
主体段落扩展
?
[Task 2
真题练习
]
–
[TS]
The most
obvious advantage
for students going to
university
is
that
university
education may contribute to enhancing the
students’
communicative abilities.
?
This is
primarily / mainly because
……
?
For example, when ……
?
By contrast, if
……
?
From the analysis above, it is clear
that ……
Task 2
主体段落扩展
?
[Task 2
真题练习
]
–
[TS] Government should
take the main responsibility to address the
environmental problem.
?
This is
primarily / mainly because
……
?
For example, when ……
?
By contrast,
……
?
From the
analysis above, it is clear that ……
Task 2
主体段落扩展
?
[Task 2
真题练习
]
–
[TS] However, on the other
hand, by stressing the role that
governments play does not mean the
individuals can not make
significant
change to the current situaiton.
?
This is
primarily / mainly because
……
?
For example, when ……
?
By contrast, if
……
?
From the analysis above, it is clear
that ……
Report
末段
?
Report
构思:
–
末段:总结要点
?
总之,
…
…
问题涉及到多方面的原因,
?
但是结合上面提到的方式,我们可以有效的减少负面影响。
?
In conclusion,
multiple reasons
result in the current …… (problem /
issue),
?
while by combining the
approaches mentioned above
,
we can
effectively
minimize
the negative influences or even eliminate the
problem.
Report
真题实战
Report
写作分析
Writing Task 2
–
In many countries, more and more young people are
leaving
school and unable to find jobs
after graduation. What problems
do you
think youth unemployment will cause to the
individuals
and the society and what
measures can be adopted to solve this
problem?
Report
写作分析
Report
写作分析
?
写
提
纲
:
p>
–
Problems that unemployment causes
?
New graduates would live
in miserable situation.
?
Cause huge waste of talent
?
Increase the instability
of society
–
Solutions
?
New graduates
should lower their working expectation
?
Graduates should equip
themselves with new skills
?
Government should make effort in creating more
working
opportunities
Report
写作分析
?
合
理
安
排
p>
:
–
Problems that unemployment causes
?
For
individuals
, new graduates would live
in miserable situation.
?
For society,
it causes huge waste of talent
?
For society,
Increase the instability of society
–
Solutions
?
At the
individual level,
new
graduates should lower their working
expectation
?
At the
individual level,
graduates should
equip themselves with new
skills
?
At the
governmental level,
government should
make effort in creating
more working
opportunities
Task 2
论点论证结构
?
Report
构思:
–
[2009.11.7] WRITING TASK 2
–
Recent statistics show that the crimes committed
by the young
people in the major city
of the world are on the increase. Give
your analysis of the reasons and the
solutions.
–
Reasons:
?
Increasing stress in life
?
Negative influence from media
?
Adolescent psychological
problems are not well treated
Task 2
论点论证结构
?
Report
构思:
–
[2009.11.7] WRITING TASK 2
–
Reasons:
?
TS: Most contributing
factors are associated with environment that
youth live in.
?
Increasing stress in life
and study
?
Negative
information from modern media
?
TS: Another element is
intertwined with psychological education.
?
Adolescent
psychological problems are not well treated
Task 2
论点论证结构
?
Report
构思:
–
[2009.11.7] WRITING TASK 2
–
Recent statistics show that the crimes committed
by the young
people in the major city
of the world are on the increase. Give
your analysis of the reasons and the
solutions.
–
Solutions:
?
Promote psychological
education
?
Provide
psychological consultancy services
?
Depurate network
environment
Task 2
论点论证结构
?
Report
构思:
–
[2009.11.7] WRITING TASK 2
–
Solutions:
?
TS: Since the
problem mainly arises from
sub-healthy
mental state,
?
TS: Corresponding actions should be
taken.
?
Promote psychological
education
?
Provide
psychological consultancy services
?
Depurate network
environment
Report
篇章结构
?
考察时间:
2009-5-21
–
2009-5-21 A
hundred years ago, people thought that the human
race was steadily
improving in every
area of life. Now it seems this is not certain in
that situation. In
which areas do you
think we have made important progress nowadays? In
which
areas do you think we need to
make progress?
话题中心:
–
–
?
Progresses
people made and problems people face
写作要求:
?
Examples of
progress
?
Examples of problems
Report
篇章结构
Task
写作框架汇总
?
考察时间:
2009-5-21
–
首段基本结构:
?
背景铺垫
+
提出问题
+
全文写作目的
–
Sample
:
?
人类生活在近两个世纪发生了翻天覆地的变化。
?
在生活水平提高的同时,人类社会也面临着诸多问题。
?
本文将探讨社会发展过程中人类取
得的巨大进步以及亟待解决的问题。
Task
写作框架汇总
?
考察时间:
2009-5-21
–
主体段基本结构:
?
主题句
+
支撑句
(+
总结句
)
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Sample
:
TS:
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人类在科技方面取得了最主要地成就。
?
SS:
–
工业科技的发展最为显著。当代工
业为社会生产了更多的消费品,并
由于机械的运用以及技术的突破,产品制造成本被大大
降低,这极大
地提高人类的生活水平。
–
交通科
技的发展对于世界发展做出了令人瞩目的贡献。新型交通工具
在节省了宝贵时间外,极大
地促进了全球化的发展,让身处异国的人
能方便往来。
–
同时,医药技术的发展给人类的健康生活提供了保障。
Task
写作框架汇总
考察时间:
2009-5-21
?
?
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Sample
:
?
TS
:
By far, the major achievements of human being can
be easily found
in scientific fields.
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SS
: The most noticeable
advancement occurs in industrial field.
?
Breakthroughs in transportation also
contribute remarkably to
the rapidly
development of the world.
?
Meanwhile, with
the improving medicine technology, healthy
life of peoples is largely guaranteed.
Task
写作框架汇总
考察时间:
2009-5-21
?
–
主体段基本结构:
?
主题句
+
支撑句
(+
总结句
)
–
Sample
:
?
?
TS:
然而,在发展过程中产生了很多问题,并需要我们立即解决。
SS:
–
最急迫的问题之一是环境污染问题
。
(
尤其是工业的发展,造成了大量的,对自然环
境的,不可补救地破坏。
)
–
其次,在不久地将来我们会自然资
源枯竭问题。
(
交通地迅猛发展也造成了严重地能
源短缺问题。
)
–
p>
在更长的时期内,社会老龄化问题也会变得严峻。(医疗科技在保障生活同时,也
间接造成了社会生产力的下降及养老问题)。
Task
写作框架汇总
?
考察时间:
2009-5-21
–
Sample
:
TS:
However, along with the
conspicuous developments, many urgent
issue arise, which require instant
solution.
?
SS:
–
One of the most
pressing issue
facing human being is
environmental pollution.
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Besides, we may
face
a serious depletion of natural
resources in
near future.
–
And in a longer
term,
a large proportion of countries
will face
thorny aging issue.
Task
写作框架汇总
考察时间:
2009-5-21
?
?
–
2009-5-21 A
hundred years ago, people thought that the
human race was steadily improving in
every area of life. Now it
seems this
is not certain in that situation. In which areas
do you
think we have made important
progress nowadays? In which
areas do
you think we need to make progress?
–
末段:
?
结构:概述问题(及解决方案)
?
总体来讲,社会总是不停向前进步
。人类的生活会越来越美好。然而在
享受现代生活的同时,每个人有义务为解决我们面临
的问题做出自己的
贡献。
当
我被上帝造出来时,上帝问我想在人间当一个怎样的人,我不假思索的说,
我要做一个伟
大的世人皆知的人。于是,我降临在了人间。
我出生在一个官
僚知识分子之家,
父亲在朝中做官,
精读诗书,
母亲知书答礼,
温柔体贴,父母给我去了一个好听的名字:李清照。
小时侯,受父母影响的我饱读诗书,聪明伶俐,在朝中享有“神童”的称
号。
小时候的我天真活泼,
才思敏捷,
小河畔,
花丛边撒满了我的诗我的笑,
无可置疑,
小时侯的我快乐无虑。
“兴尽晚回舟,误入藕花深
处。争渡,争渡,惊起一滩鸥鹭。”青春的我如同
一只小鸟,
自
由自在,
没有约束,
少女纯净的心灵常在朝阳小,
流水也被自然洗礼,
纤细的手指拈一束花,轻抛入水,随波荡漾,发髻上沾着
晶莹的露水,双脚任水流
轻抚。身影轻飘而过,留下一阵清风。
可是晚年的我却生活在一片黑暗之中,家庭的衰败,社会的改变,消磨着我那
柔弱的心。
我几乎对生活绝望,
每天在痛苦中消磨
时光,
一切都好象是灰暗的。
“寻
寻觅
觅冷冷清清凄凄惨惨戚戚”这千古叠词句就是我当时心情的写照。
最后,香消玉殒,我在痛苦和哀怨中凄凉的死去。
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