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读后续写高分作文的写作方法指导
（以衡水中学四月联考英语作文为例）
2020
江苏省丰县中学上课讲义
正文指导
版本一：
But
no
more
helicopters
came
and
it
was
getting
dark
again.
But
no
more
helicopters
came
and
it
was
getting
dark
again.
The
ceiling
of
thick
branches
shut
out
the
sky
and
covered
the
path
in
darkness.
Jane
looked
around
blankly,
a
shiver
of
alarm
going
through
her.
Soon
the
full
moon
rose,
large,
round
and
clear,
shining
in
the
deep
blue.
“Why
not
pick
stones
from
the
stream
and
make
them
in
the
form
of
SOS?”
cried
Jane
excitedly,
determined
to
save
herself
independently
.
Having
finished
it,
she
felt
so
exhausted
and
slept
beside
the
stones.
T
omorrow
will
be
another
day.
It
was
daybreak
when
Jane
woke
up.
Birds
were
chirping,
the
branches
swaying
to
the
rhythm
of
the
wind,
and
the
leaves
fluttering
like
graceful
butterflies.
A
ray
of
hope
rose
naturally
in
her
heart.
Suddenly,
the
buzzing
of
the
helicopter
came
overhead
again.
It
did
saw
her
waving
yellow
blouse
and
most
important
the
SOS.
Upon
its
landing,
so
thrilled
was
she
that
she
threw
herself
at
T
om
and
hugged
him
tightly,
tears
of
joy
welling
up
in
their
eyes.
“I
miss
you
so
much.
Have
you
found
the
spot?”
“Yes,
in
our
heart.”
版本二：
But
no
more
helicopters
came
and
it
was
getting
dark
again.
The
trees
cracked
and
groaned
in
the
dark.
A
thrill
of
alarm
came
through
Jane.
Eventually,
she
determined
on
spotting
an
open
area,
awaiting
another
helicopter
.
She
stumbled
her
way
through
the
horrible
forests
and
climbed
to
a
high
place.
No
time
to
waste.
After
she
flagged
her
yellow
blouse,
Jane
sank
to
the
ground,
anguished
and
defeated.
Gazing
at
the
sky,
Jane
recalled
T
om
and
tears
blurred
her
eyes.
T
errified
as
she
was,
she
fell
fast
asleep
in
the
wild.
It
was
daybreak
when
Jane
woke
up.
And,
as
luck
would
have
it,
a
helicopter
just
came
by!
Jane
yelled
and
skipped,
waving
her
yellow
blouse.
T
o
her
great
joy,
the
helicopter
noticed
her
and
landed.
What
astounded
her
most
was
that
it
was
T
om
who
sat
in
the
helicopter!
Out
rushed
T
om.
A
huge
smile
spread
across
Jane's
face
and
the
couple
hugged
tightly
for
a
long
time.
It
was
the
narrow
escape
that
made
Jane
perceive
that
love
was
priceless.
Over
the
next
years,
a
change
came
over
the
couple.
Reasoned
discussion
replaced
fierce
arguments
and
politeness
replaced
contrariness.
They
treasured
the
life
and
love
more.
结论是：
1.
首
先要找到
conflict
在哪里，然后最多五句话说清楚
写。
第一篇昨天文章里已经分析过，下面只说第二篇：
solution
。
解
决方案不包括心情和环境描
Solution:
She
stumbled
her
way
through
the
horrible
forests
and
climbed
to
a
high
place.
a
helicopter
just
came
by.
Out
rushed
Tom.
看起来就非常简单，无非就
是：找空地失败；天亮飞机又来了；夫妇重逢。
2.
其
次围绕
solution
，进行心情和环境描写的铺垫
，以上两篇都是非常好的例子。第一篇昨天已
经分析过，第二篇的分析：
第一段：
环境描写烘托恐惧：
The
trees
cracked
and
groaned
in
the
dark.
A
thrill
of
alarm
came
through
Jane.
心情描写：
Jane
sank
to
the
ground,
anguished
and
defeated.
Gazing
at
the
sky,
Jane
recalled
T
om
and
tears
blurred
her
eyes.
Terrified
as
she
was,
she
fell
fast
asleep
in
the
wild.
第二段：
心情描写：
A
huge
smile
spread
across
Jane's
face
and
the
couple
hugged
tightly
for
a
long
time.
但这篇的结尾太多的议论
不合适，需要大胆舍弃部分，这样也不会超出太多的字数。
实战：
（衡
水
中
学
四
月
联
考
卷
）