作文范文之作文第一段怎么写

作文第一段怎么写

【篇一：托福写作第一段怎么写出来】

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托福写作第一段怎么写出来

摘要：

写作最重要的一步就是审题， 因为审题关系到整个文章思路

的确定，而审题准确有否最直接的体现就是文章的开篇段。

写作的开头和结尾都是非常重要 的，有了好的开头我们在能跟阅卷

老师留下好的印象，我们才能根据开头展开我们接下来 的叙述，对

我们的发挥也是至关重要的，而今天，小编我主要就来为大家为大

托福

写作第一段该如何写，才能获得高分。

一般来说，

托福写作

第一段的写作可分为两大步骤：

第一步就是用简洁明了的句子对原题目的意思进行同义替换

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第二步是提出自己的观点。

这两大步骤细化起来可以概括为四句话：

第一句，采用同义替换的方式对原题目的意思进行更改，当 然是

“

形变神不变

”;

第二句，对题目的意思进行解释

第三句，提出自己的观点

;

第四句，概括自己所提出观点的理由，引起下文。

下面具体用一些客户常犯的毛病题目来解释这个

两大步，四个句

子

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的具体运用方法。

案例

1

：误解原意思

do you agree or disagree

：

because people are busy with

doing so many things

，

they can do few things well?

original

：

some people may hold the view that they are able to do things

well even if they are busy with doing so many things

simultaneously or during a given period. although plausible at

the first glance

，

i disagree with the statement.

depending on my own personal experience and personality

，

i

firmly maintain that people can do few things well when they

are busy with doing so many things. my arguments of this

opinion are listed as follows.

解析：

文章第一句话不是对原题目意思进行解释，而是采用采取了和原意

思相反的做法来进行题 目诠释

;

第二句表明自己对误解题目的观点

;

第

三句话对自己的观点进行近一步的解释

;

第四句一个过渡性的句子。

开篇内容安排倒是很好， 但是作者犯了误解原题目意思的错误导致

后面整个文字都做了无用功。

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改后：

when people are engaged in a large extent of work

simultaneously

，

they will not be able to perform all of them

perfectly. just imagine how terrible it will be

：

too many jobs

need to be done by the same person in a given time. once such

a picture appears in my mind

，

i feel dizzy. to me

，

it is

impossible to do everything well with the limited energy and

many others factors .therefore

，

i agree with the statement too

many things to be done at the same time cause few to be well

done . the reasons are as follow.

revised

：

第一句话对原题目意思进行了很好的诠释

;

第二、三 句话进一步解释

原题目

;

第四句话提出 自己的观点

;

第五句话过渡性句子引起下文。

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案例

2

：语言罗嗦，绕弯子给出自己观点，浪费时间

some young adults want independence from th

eir parents as soon as possible. other young adults prefer to

live with their families for a longer time. which of these

situations do you think is better? use specific reasons and

examples to support your opinion.

original

：

with the development of science and technology

，

people’s

living standard has been improving day by day.

according to the family plan

，

one couple could have only one

child. so child becomes the center of the whole family. some of

them are even spoiled. therefore

，

i think it is better if the

young adult could live independent from their parents as soon

as possible.

解析：

这个开头看似没有任何问题，但是仔细分析就会发现很多问题。首

先，作者绕了个大弯才 给出自己的观点。其次，观点是对原题目的

抄写，改动的比较少。最后，开篇缺少引起下 文的过渡句。更大的

错误是这个开头更像是一个全文主要观点的一个分论点。