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小作文,家用能源和气体排放
The above two charts depict the
Austrilianhousehold
energy use and the
corresponding gas emissions of each type
of energyuse.
From the first pie chart we could
see thatwater heating
and heating are
two major types of energy use, which oupies
30%and 42% of all the energy used in
one household. Other
appliances use 15%
ofthe energy, and then refrigeration,
lighting and cooling, which share the
left13% of energy.
Figures in the second chart are quitedifferent
from that
of the first chart. Heating,
which consumes 42% of a
household
’
senergy, only emits 15% of all
the gas that one
household produces.
But the gasemission and energy use of
water heating are pretty even, at
around 30%. Costs only7%
of all the
energy, refrigeration produces 14% of all the
gas, which goes forthe condition of
other appliances and
the figures are 15% and 28%, and for
thecondition of
lighting, 4% and 8%.
Cooling consumes 2% of energy and
contributesto 3% of gas emission.
To sum up, water
heating and heatingconsume 72% of
energy and produces only 47% of gas.
Refrigeration and
otherappliances,
though only use 22% of energy, emit 42% of
gas.
大作文,
教小孩是非观要不要从小时候就开始教,
要不要
punishment
Indeed, children need to learn how
to ___right from
wrong as they grow
into adults. But as far as I am
concerned, it isbetter for us to teach
this ability to them
when they are
older rather than atan early age. Moreover,
certain punishments are required to
make sure childrencould
behave
themselves.
For
starter, it would be easier for us toteach
children
about the difference between
right and wrong when they
beeolder.
Young children, due to their lack of life
experience,
have difficultiesin understanding moral
lectures. However, after they grow up a
little, theycould
better digest the
meaning of what is right and wrong based
on their pastexperience, thus will
grasp the notion of
right and wrong
more easily andthoroughly.
Similarly, older children tend to
know moreabout
punishment, and will be
able to learn from the punishment
caused by theirfail to recognize the
distinction between
right and wrong.
Punishment mighthave long-lasting
influences on younger children for they
are too fragile.
Olderchildren, on the
other hand, could handle punishment
more with ease and couldfigure out the
reason they got
punished. Therefore,
they could gain betterunderstanding
about right and wrong than younger
children do.
The
sort of punishment for parents andteachers to use
whey they are trying to teach children
about good behavior
is asubtle issue.
But the function of punishment is
undeniable. It is necessary topunish a
child because of his
or her wrong
acting. I suggest to use criticizeor physical
training, such
as asking children to do cleaning, as
punishment.
To conclude, teaching children about rightand
wrong
should be waited until children
bee older. Aompanied by
certainways of
punishment, the teaching process would be
more productive.
The graph describes the portion of
the population above
aged 65 between
1940 and 2040 in the three
countries---
USA,Sweden and Japan. As
shown in the graph, it is expected
to
have increments in the rate of old people .
In 1940,the
proportion of population above age 65
remained extremely low, as the figure
of these countries
stood at 9%(in
USA),8%(in Sweden) and only 5%(in Japan).
However by the end of the 1980 ,the
number of old people in
USA and Sweden
had dramatically grown ,arriving at 15% and
14% respectively; by contrast, it had
indicated a slight
decrease in Japan
,then reminded approximate 3% in the
corresponding period .Subsequently,
fluctuation showed ,but
had been predicted that the rate of the
elder was going to
descend around 10%
in both USA and sweden.
After 1980, the number of Japanese
old people had been
consistently toward
an upward trend .The portion of
population above age 65 in Japan will
overtake it of Sweden
and USA
in(around?) 2030. Clearly,the circumstances of
USA,Sweden and Japen will reach the
similar point.
呵呵,谢谢您啊,我还想问一下最后一句,这
3
个
国家都是在
2040
年达到相似的,那么最后一句直接像您这么
写好,还是要加上
2030~2040
的趋势好啊?还有最后达
到的具体数字需要写么???
您估计写成这样有多少分呀?
如果考試有類似的圖表你最後也可以在結尾部分加一下<
/p>
2030-
2040
這三個國家的數字比
例的敘述
因為你前面有提到比例但後面沒提
5.5
應該不是問題
看得出來你有背不少片語但要避免語法缺失
讓本來
5.5
以上的文章往下扣
一般小作文清楚表達題意就有
5
愈少語法錯誤就會有
6
大作文則多需要套用模組比較不會浪費時間在思索文章結構上
第一段的第一句话要修改:
From the table
below we can get
the information that
different country has different
percentage of national consumer
expenditure.
第二段的第一句话要改:
First,as we seen
consumers of
Ireland and Turkey spend
most of their money on
food
、
drinks or tobao.
第二句把第二句中
people
前的
< br>the
去掉。
你这篇应该是
6
分。
开头第一段,不要特地把
line
chart
,
bar chart
写出
来。显得
有点啰嗦,而且我们主要看你是否能把图表信息描述清楚,至于是
啥图,并不关心。第二句话,很有问题。我想这应该用
the most
popular travel destinations
而不是
famous
。。。
第二段:
不要老用
< br>visitors
,换成
tourists
或者
travelers
都行。
both arrived at around 10 millions respectively.
这
里,怎么既用
both
又用
respectively
,那么到底是都还是
分别
呢?
a sharp growth UK visitors visited 5 most popular
states were
。。。
p>
缺少
the
,改成
the 5 most popular nations
among UK
tourists
要好点
最后一点,对你的内容选择上有点建议。既然给你
2
个可以比较
的信息,你就得比较它们一下。
用一些词比如
几倍多,更多等等。
用
的词有点简单了。语法没有太大的错误,基本过关。从句的量可
以再多一点。所使用的逻
辑衔接词,都挺不错。但是,在描述时间
轴上的信息时,缺乏衔接。描述得也略微简单了
点。总的来说,
6
分是一个比较合理的分。
a
【
higher than
average
】
proportion of
【
X
】中
这个【
X
】才是决定谓语动词的关键。
a
。。。
proportion of
【
households
】
were living in
poverty
。。。
。。。高于平均比例的【家庭】生活在贫困当中。。。
当语句的意思被理解的时候,语法的辨析也变得豁然开朗。
也就说
proportion
后面省略
了
of
them
,从句谓语对应的是
both types of
household with
children
,是这个意思吧?
省略了
of them
你说对了,但是
them
指代的是
household
s
(
with
children
)
从文意角度:
因为我没看前后文,所以中文意思大致应该是:
值得注意的是,在这两种【有孩子的家庭】中,
有高于平均比例的【家
庭
households
】生活在贫困当中。
< br>
而不是。。
。有高于平均比例的【种类
types
】生活在贫困当
中。
从语法角度:
实质还是
households
were living in poverty
而不是
typ
es
【
of household with
children
仅仅是
types
的修饰成分
】,因
为
types were li
ving
是错误的说法,而且注意介词【
for
】
for
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