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应用文书写
目前存在问题：
我不知道如何“凑”够字数
对比参考范文，我依然不知道自己的作文能得多少分
我不知道如何利用老师提供的范文
书信写作部分所得分数与所用时间不成正比
书信写作评分中的“档”
满分
15
分：
一档（
13-15
分）：二档（
9-12
）：三档（
4-8
< br>）：四档（
1-3
）
聚焦“一档文”
< br>一档（
13-15
分）：
内容完整，条例清楚；交际得体，表达时充分考虑到了交际的需求；体现
出比较强的语言运用能力。完全达到了预期的写作目的。
书信写作评分“四要素”
内容完整；语言准确；调理清晰；交际得体
书信写作评分的“两抓手”与“三步走”
“两抓手”：内容
+
语言
“三步走”：是否及格（要点齐全）；定档（内
容
+
语言）；给分
内容：要点，细节，交际性表达
语言：
二档文（
9-12
< br>分）
Dear Jim
There are many famous people in the
Chinese history. Of all these famous
people, I like Lu Xun the best.
Lu Xun was a famous poet during the
history who made a large contribution to
the Chinese people. First, he wrote
many passages to teach people. Then, he made the
people begin to know the world.
Finally, his book taught people a
lot.(
三个细节看似
一个
)
gain/acquire
He taught me that we should learn
knowledge to protect ourselves. And we need
to study
I like Lu Xun
Yours
Li Hua
要点齐全
，细节没有太多条理，交际性句型没有，语言简单，没有大的语言错
误。
三档文（
4-8
）
Dear Jim
I have received your letter recently,
now I will answer your question in the
letter,
tell you, one of my
favorite person.
I like Zhuge
Liang best. In my mind, he was clever and
friendly. He was try his
best to help
Liu Bei, who is the president of Shu. He was a
friendly person. He cared
about
everyone around him. And he can do everything best
by himself, if don' t have
him, Shu
must dead as early as possible.
I
was learn more about him. As try my best to help
someone, keep mind clever,
friendly to
everyone.
I know you were interested
in Chinese history. I think Zhuge Liang is the
best.
What do you
think? I was very glad to talk with you. Looking
forward to your reply
Yours
，
Li Hua
要点貌似齐全，语言质量太差。<
/p>
开头结尾句型通顺，为背诵句型，考场上
分本没有反映出真实的语
言能力。
考场满分文
How have you been? I am excited about
your interest in Chinese history.
Here I would like to introduce Li Bai,
a famous poet in Tang Dynasty to you.
As you know, Li Bai wrote about 2000
poems in his life, most of which were written
about beautiful scenery of his beloved
country. His poems had an immense influence
on the history of literature in our
country.
My adoration of
his poems was such that one day it suddenly dawned
on me that
I would major in Chinese
Ancient Poetry in Peking University so that I
could enjoy
and study his poems for the
rest of my life.
This is
the figure who has influenced me most. You can
google his poems and if
you have any
problems in understanding them, I would be more
than willing to offer
you my hand
要点齐全，细节充实，交际得体
如何对待写作中的套路？
充分理解：
I really appreciate
your help.
(
感
谢
)
appreciate+
人：
赏识
适时使用：
How is everything
going
？并不是所有文章都需要
要套路，更要有思路！模版性句型主要帮助节省考场写作构思时间。
2.1
书信写作中的要点
内容准确
引人（收信人和阅卷人）注
目：关键表达
+
突出位置
合乎常理，有“典型性”（基于社会生活）
2015
年北京高考
第一节（
15
分）
假设你是红星中学高三学生李华，请给你的美国朋友
Jim
写一封邮件，告
诉他你打算参加龙舟训练
营，希望他一起参加。邮件的内容包括：
1.
介绍训练营的相关内容（例如：时间、地点、参加者等）；
2.
说明你打算参加的原因；
3.
询问对方的意向。
注意：
1.
词数不少于
50
；
2.
开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
提示词：
龙舟训练营
Dragon Boat Training Camp
Dear Jim,
__________________
__________________________________________________
_
______________________________________
_______________________________
________
__________________________________________________
___________
____________________________
_____________________________
Yours,
Li Hua
针对要点：
介绍训练营的相关内容（例如：时间、地点、参加者等）；
时间，地点，参加者属于开放性信息，需要合理
The camp starts on July
1
st
in Beihai Park and will
last for 5 days/around the lake
in the suburb area.
2017
年海淀期末
假设你是红星中学学生会主席李华。由于天气原因，你校原定于本周五举行的
活
动有所调整，请用英文口头通知留学生相关事宜。内容包括：
1.
公园
5
公里慢跑调整为校内观看中国电影；
2.
电影名称，观看时间和地点；
3.
观看该电影的理由。
2.
电影名称，观看时间和地点；
Chinese movie for foreign students who
are teenagers
流浪地球
—
中国人家的概念
功夫熊猫
-made in Hollywood
百鸟朝凤
-
唢呐师傅寻找弟子传承文化
舌尖上的中国
-
剧集（
虽有电影但是不具有典型性）
大话西游
-
基于四大名著（外国学生知道不知道？）
-
爱情电影（适合中学生年
龄？）