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A graduate from the Harbin
Institute of Technologies, an institution of
higher learning known for
its
selectivity,
I
have
solidly
grounded
myself
in
a
discipline
that
is
still
new
in
China,
namely,
mechatronics.
With
four
years
of
strict
training
and
conscientious
studies
behind,
I
am
now
versed
in
a
broad
range
of
subjects
related
to
this
discipline.
But
I
would
like
to
pursue
more
advanced studies in it. I now apply for
acceptance into your Master' program for the sole
reason
that your program is one of the
few that offer graduate studies in mechatronics.
（一般而言，开
头并不是一定要依时间顺序介绍自己的童年。
扼要的阐明自己目前的情况和学习的愿望往往
更好。
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I first
became fascinated with making electronic devices
in
high school. Until then, I was
content
with making mechanical gadgets,
from which I derived immense
pleasure.
As a child, I made my
own toy gliders
and vacuum cleaners. In making such things, I
instinctively grasped the principles
of
aeromechanics.
After
I
entered
into
junior
high
school,
I
began
to
make
small
electronic
appliances
by
using
electrical
circuit
boards.
As
I
experimented
for
new
inventions,
I
felt
more
and
more constrained by the limited approaches. I
yearned to make really
user-friendly
gadgets
and devices that could be
readily accepted on the market.
At the university, I chose mechatronics
as my major for
its interdisciplinary
nature. Built on the
combined strength
of mechanics, electronics, computer science and
automatic control, this genre
of
studies
does away the single-mindedness
inherent in the pursuit of studies in one area.
With
mechatronics,
I
began
to
create
a
much
larger
variety
of
products
that
could
serve
a
lot
of
different
purposes.
The
onset
of
mechatronics
represents
to
me
a
major
step
forward
in
the
manufacturing technology.
I
thoroughly
enjoyed
the
four
years
of
my
undergraduate
studies
at
the
Harbin
Institute
of
Technology, a major cradle of China's
engineering talents. I found most of the courses I
took not
only
instructive
but
also
entertaining.
But
I
particularly
liked
the
hands-
on
experience
that
the
Institute always
promoted and required. For virtually every course
of my major, we engaged in
assorted
experiments
and
projects.
The
completion
of
each
experiment
or
academic
paper
brought me immense satisfaction by
giving me an unmistakable sense of achievement.
I
feel
that
technology
makes
sense
only
when
it
serves
some
human
purpose.
A
good
product
therefore has to be
designed and tailored to conform to human habits,
some of which may be
based
on misperceptions or
misconceptions. Designers of consumer
products have to be aware
of
and take into consideration those misperceptions
or misconceptions so that the products they
design have enduring attraction to
consumers.
All this is easier
said than done,
of course,
as it
requires the
designers
not
only a sophisticated understanding
of human nature but also superb
engineering skills to realize his
ideas. I am glad to say that I have
both.