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计算机专业“个人陈述”样本
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者
按
：
Computer
Science
Personal
Statement
Computing and its
applications have always fascinated me and
for this reason I have foun...
Computer Science Personal
Statement
Computing and its applications have
always fascinated me
and for this
reason I have found my A-level courses extremely
interesting. This also has maintained
my long-term interest in
computer-
related careers.
I
have
studied
mathematics,
physics
and
computing
to
A-level and also during the first year
at Hills Road Sixth Form
College
I
re-took
my
GCSE
English.
Last
year
and
this
year
I
have been improving my self-learning,
and developing many
skills with the
help of the key skills qualifications and A-level
General Studies.
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My
sincerest
desire
is
to
become
a
computer
scientist.
Specifically, I
am interested in exploring how problems can be
modeled and solved using artificial
intelligence. I also want to
learn
about human cognition and machine intelligence. I
have
been studying the online debate
over whether machines will
ever become
and
reading
about
such
issues
as
whether
a
machine
can
acquire
sense
(as
discussed
in
Hubert
Dreyfus's
book
“
What
Computers Still Can't Do
”
).
I have been exploring
many different
areas within the domain of artificial intelligence
(such
as
neural
networks,
genetic
algorithms,
and
natural
language
processing). The bottom line is that I want to be
a
part of this exciting field.
Over
the
summer
I
traveled
to
Russia,
and
thoroughly
enjoyed exploring
a very different part of the world.
My other interests include
current affairs and sports, such
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as football, tennis and
general fitness. Ever since the start of
sixth
form
I
have
been
a
successful
member
of
the
college
football
team.
I
have
played
basketball
as
an
enrichment
activity because
it was a new sport to me at the beginning of
sixth
form.
I
also
participated
in
a
5-a-side
indoor
football
tournament
at
the
college.
In
addition
to
pursuing
my
academic studies I would like to
continue some of these sports
at
university.
。
一般情况下，
申请从前一年的
6
月开始完成在线申请。
但如果你
想申请明年的剑桥大学、牛津大学，或者医学、牙科以及兽医课程，
则必须
在今年的
10
月
15
< br>日前提出。其他大学一般都会延长到次年
的
1
月中旬。当年的
6
月，甚至
9
月，申请者还有机会申请那些有
空额而未能录满的大学。<
/p>
英国大学
申请表的内容由五部分组成，
个人信息、
选择的大学和
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专业、
教育背景
、
工作简历和个人陈述。
各大学最看重的是个人陈述。
这部分被认为是自己给自己做的广告，
对录取与否至关重要。
我看到
大厅里的资料架上摆放着一本书，
就是专门
指导申请者如何撰写个人
陈述的。
一份好的个人陈述可以帮助说服对方录取你，
因此是申请的重要
部分。
它给你机会告诉高校为什么应
该录取你。
招生负责人希望了解
你对所选课程感兴趣，
以及你的热情和投入。
推荐信同样也是申请的
关
键部分。
没有推荐人的完整资料和推荐信，
对方不会处理你的申
请，
且不接受家庭成员及朋友的推荐信。
如何提高自己申请的命中率
?
招办人员的建议是，申请者应尽早
对申请专
业和学校进行研究，
尽量选择适合自己基本条件相符的专业
和学
校。
既要对期望学习的专业和学校有深入研究，
更要对其录取资
格和条件有全面了解。
编者按：
Soulfish's personal
statement From an early age
I
’
ve always been
deeply interested in computing. It was my
dad, in...
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Soulfish's personal
statement
From
an early age I
’
ve always
been deeply interested in
computing.
It
was
my
dad,
introducing
me
to
the
computer
systems at his work
place that first sparked this interest. I can
always
remember
the
feeling
of
wanting
to
know
just
how
computers worked, why they worked and
what else they could
do.
This interest never left me, only
growing more profound
and
passionate
with
every
new
discovery
I
made.
From
communicating
with
an
artificial
intelligence
to
seeing
the
wonders of the Internet for the first
time, computers have left
me
fascinated
with
just
how
much
power
yet
mystery
they
A-Levels
I
chose
to
study
have
all
helped
me
to
develop
both
myself
and
my
understanding
of
the
subject.
Physics for example has helped me to
understand how certain
parts of a
computer function, while Computing has given me a
greater
insight
into
the
business
aspects
of
the
computer
industry.
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Chemistry
and Physics
have both
helped
to
improve my
analytical and evaluative skills.
Within maths I have been lucky
enough
to
have
a
teacher
who
was
very
interested
in
computer science. He has
been especially helpful, lending me
books
such
as
G
ouml;del,
Escher,
Bach:
an
Eternal
Golden
Braid.
This
has
given
me
an
insight
into
the
richness
that
is
computer
interest
in
computing
has
not
been
restricted
to
the
classroom
and
college
life.
Within
the
last
twelve months
I
’
ve used the knowledge that
I
’
ve gained over
the past twelve years together with the
help of my family to
set up my own
computer related business. This has given me a
totally
new
perspective
on
how
certain
things
function,
and
how business operates.
The writing of a business plan was a
totally
alien
experience
for
me,
but
over
the
course
of
9
months I researched and
planned, and finally when the plan
was
complete I was rewarded with the satisfaction of
knowing
that
I
had
completed
something
that
most
people
would
never have the chance to do especially
at my age.
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Through
the
setting
up
of
the
company
and
its
subsequent running I
have learnt many things. These include
how to balance tasks effectively, how
critical teamwork can be
and
how
to
delegate
tasks
to
get
the
job
done
quickly
and
well
as spending time both studying and helping
to
run
the
business
I
understand
the
importance
of
having
time to relax. One of
my hobbies that I try to make time for is
learning to fly, and gaining my private
pilots license. As a child
I dreamed of
becoming a pilot and luckily its one dream that
I
’
ve managed to follow. I
love the freedom that flying gives you
and the control that you have when in
the air. Training for my
private
pilots
license
(PPL)
has
also
involved
me
taking
onboard a lot of
responsibility for the safety of those onboard,
and those around the aircraft. From
ensuring that I carry out
the
pre-flight
checks
correctly,
and
knowing
what
’
s
around
you
both
while
you
’
re
on
the
ground
and
in
the
air
to
ensuring
that I
’
m prepared for any
eventuality.
I
also enjoy both playing and watching tennis.
I
’
ve played
in
various
competitions
before,
and
have
helped
to
umpire
junior matches at my club. To ensure
that I can fit everything in
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I
’
ve
had to develop very good time management,
prioritising
what I need to do
efficiently.I
’
m looking
forward with great
anticipation
to
the
challenges
that
studying
for
a
degree
in
computer science will bring.
编
者
按
：
Compu
ter
Science
Personal
Statement
Computing and its
applications have always fascinated me and
for this reason I have foun...
Computer Science Personal
Statement
Computing and its
applications have always fascinated me
and for this reason I have found my
A-level courses extremely
interesting.
This also has maintained my long-term interest in
computer-related careers.
I
have
studied
mathematics,
physics
and
computing
to
A-level and also during the first year
at Hills Road Sixth Form
8
College I re-took my GCSE English. Last
year and this ...
范文。
Dear sir or madam,
As
the
Vice
Dean
of
School
of
International
Business,
Tianjin
ForeignStudiesUniversity
(TFSU),
I
am
writing
with
pleasure to recommend Wang Ye to
youresteemed university.
I
got to know her personally since 2007 as I was her
class
advisor.
And
I
taught
her
International
Economics.
In
my
course, she
showed her craving for knowledge. She often read
relative economic books to enrich
herself. And she also asked
me
to
recommend
some
text
books
and
materials
to
study.
When she had
confusion, she always tried her best to figure
out the question.
Miss Wang is a self-motivated student.
For all I know, her
average score is
over 85 and she won scholarships every year
in
the
past
three
years.
Therefore,
she
was
selected
into
the
experimental
class
in
the
third
academic
year.
This
class
consists
of
the
best
students
of
Department
of
International
Economics
and
Trade,
Department
of
Economics
and
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Department of Finance.
What
’
s more, she practiced
in a small
company
to
gain
experience
during
the
winter
and
summer
vacations.
I am
confident that she will be qualified and perform
as
well
as
she
did
in
TFSU.
Therefore,
I
recommend
her
with
enthusiasm.
I
hope
that
you
will
consider
her
application
favorably.
Please
don
’
t
hesitate
to
contact
me
if
you
need
more
information.
Yours
Sincerely
XXX
有几个小建议。
< br>学生可能很难知道从哪里开始自己的个人陈述，或者如何不傲
慢的描述你的技能和
经验，
但同时也能确保你在其他申请者中脱颖而
出。出国留学网
有些建议。
1.
写之前要计划
在你开始之前，简要概述一下你想在你的个人陈述中提出的观
点，并确保你回答了这
些问题；是什么，为什么，怎么做。你想学什
么？你为什么想学英语？你的技能和过去的
经验如何证明这一点？
要做到这一
点，一个好办法是拿出你认为与你所选学科相关的
几个关键技能，并举例说明你是如何使
用这些技能的。
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2.
格式正确
正确的格式会让你的个人陈述看起来整洁而专业。把它分成几
个段落，包括引言和结论。
每一段都应该讨论一个不同的主题，
这样
你的个人陈述才能读起来清晰流畅。
比如：
段
1
：介绍
段
2
：教育
教学
段
3
：你为什么感兴趣，如何证明
段
4
：兴趣爱好（包括相关工作经验）
段
5
：结论
很重要的一点是，每一段都要很好地衔接到下一段。
3.
介绍清晰而直接
从一开始就抓住读者的注意力，用一个强有力的开头句突出你
的主要技能，并概述你为什么要申请这门课程。
你必须讲得具体，迅速切入要点。不要花时间为你的第一句话
想半天，也绝对不要使用“这是我从小就想做的事情”这样的陈词滥
调。这些东西不会给招生人员留下深刻印象，而且经常被滥用。
很多人觉得先写其他段落，然后再写引言和结论更容易。把引
言和结论联系起来会让你的个人陈述更流畅。
4.
有例子（但要确保它们是相关的）
当然，如果你做了很多课外活动是很好的，但是记住要把它们
和
课程联系起来——如果它们不相关，就不要写进去。
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你说的话后面可以跟一个：
“
so w
hat
？”在这个的后续，你可
以谈论你因此发展的技能，以及
你从这个经历中学到了什么。
把你
做过的每件事都塞进文章是很多人想做的，但是有选择性
的假例子会更有效。你可以在面
试中，或者当你申请未来的工作时，
谈论这些事情。它们迟早会派上用场，只是现在不行
！
5.
在“个人陈述”中加入“个人”
<
/p>
使你的申请个性化，确保它听起来不是虚假的或通用的。是什
么让
你与众不同？要勇于打破常规，招生老师会阅读数百份个人陈
述，所以说一些稍微不同的
东西会让你的申请脱颖而出。
不要
引用别人的话——招生老师想听的是你要说的话，而不是
比尔·盖茨曾经说过的话。
6.
如果你已经做了你的研究——说出来
这听起来一点也不谦虚，但是在写个人陈述的时候，重要的是
要
表现出你对这个主题的热情。
如果你读过任何相关的书，
简要地
谈
谈你从他们那里学到了什么，
以及他们为什么培养了你对这个
主题的
兴趣。
如果你花时间阅读了这门课程，
< br>它会向你的招生导师表明你对
知识扩展的渴望。
但你没有必要谈论你读过的所有可能有点相关的东西。选择性
是关键。
7.
结论要简短，但内容要丰富
结论是你给招生导师留下印象的最后机会。用它来总结和探索
你之前提到的主题，
并将它们应用到更广泛的环境中。
确定你的个人
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陈述的主要信息是什么，并在结论中重申这一点。
如前所述，将你的结论与你的引言段连接起来。回顾你在第一
段所说的内容，并展示你是如何在你的个人陈述中体现出来的。
记住——结论不需要太长——一两句话就可以了。
8.
完成后再校对
必须强调这一点。核查你的个人陈述，然后把它发送给朋友或
家人检查。
一般人很容易漏掉自己工作中的错误，
所以最好在寄出之
< br>前让别人通读一遍。
个人陈
述中最差的就是拼写错误。在阅读你的个人陈述时，这
一点会一直留在读者的脑海中。<
/p>
范文。
STATEMENT OF PURPOSE
’
For
Knowledge
Itself
Is
Power
’
.
This
is
one
of
my
favorite
precepts and at this point in my life when I am
about
to complete my graduation and my
future spreads in front of
me like a
dream
，
this adage
has never influenced my life more
than
this before.
Knowledge and
proper training are essential to succeed
in today
＇
s highly
competitive world. The best place where I
can
achieve
this
is
in
the
United
States
of
America
-
the
undisputed leader in developing new
products and processes.
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Not
only
is
America
the
birthplace
of
my
chosen
field
of
study
，
it
has
also
nurtured
it
for
it
＇
s
full
growth
and
continuous
development.
To
achieve
my
goals
，
I
want
to
pursue a Master
＇
s
program in Computer Science. It is the ideal
way for me to gain the knowledge and
skills to stand tall as a
computer
professional.
During
my
undergraduate
studies
，
I
acquired
a
comprehensive
knowledge
of
computer
hardware
in
all
its
complexity.
I
also
learnt
of
diverse
software
and
their
applications. The highly dedicated
teaching staff of my college
taught
me
the
various
concepts
involved
in
the
field
of
computer
engineering.
Some
of
the
subjects
I
studied
were
computer
graphics
，
computer methodology and
algorithms
，
logic
circuits
，
principles of communication
engineering
，
C
programming
，
object
oriented
programming
as
well
as
programming using different tools.
I
take
a
keen
interest
in
Networking
and
Database
Management Systems.
As a part of my final year
curriculum
，
I
am
working
on
a
project
with
one
of
the
India
＇
s
finest
web-site designing
companies - MicroGiga Info. Sys. Ltd. The
aim
of
the
project
is
to
create
a
web-
site.
The
web-
site
，
called
＂
Jobs4All
＂，
aims
to
provide
the
user
with
a
job
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depending
upon
his
qualifications.
Various
database
concepts
＇
，
programming
scripts
and
the
maintenance
of
a
server are some of the features
included in our web-site. Some
of the
products and tools used are ASP
scripts
，
Java
scripts
，
Microsoft Access
＇
97
，
Personal Web
Server
，
etc. I am
also
interested
in
System
Programming.
For
this
very
reason
，
I
have
selected
Compiler
Construction
as
the
elective
subject
for my final year.
There is truly no end to
learning
，
as this
has become a
world
where
a
constant
addition
to
abilities
is
the
key
to
growth
in
a
dynamic
world.
I
am
fortunate
to
belong
to
a
family that places a high value of
education. I have been given
all the
encouragement and facility to develop my talents
and
interests. I have completed several
courses in public speaking
and
leadership training. Sports
，
music and reading also fill my
life. I was also one of the
organizer
＇
s for the Open
Software
competition in TECHNOMANIA
＇
98
，
which is an inter-college
festival
annually
，
organized annually by my college. I am
also
an active participant in various
events held in other institutes.
I
seek
to
fulfill
my
goals
in
an
environment
that
encourages creativity
and motivation. I feel confident that the
staff and facilities in your institute
will provide me with such an
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environment. I am well
aware of the demands of studying in
the
more competitive American environment. I am
certain that
I
am
mentally
and
physically
competent
to
succeed
at
your
school. I am basically
a hard working and a sincere person. My
enthusiasm and urge to excel will help
me to make the best
use of every
learning opportunity.
In
conclusion
I
would
like
to
say
that
the
knowledge
gained
from
4
years
of
engineering
has
provided
me
with
a
solid
foundation.
This
will
certainly
help
me
in
my
desire
to
specialize in my chosen field. My
country India has a thriving
software
industry. I aim to study abroad and return with
the
skill and competence to
find my mark and be a vital part of
this booming
，
futuristic industry. I assure you of my
sincerity
，
dedication and hard work.
详细介绍一下如何写一篇好的个人陈述。
前言：除了学术能力之外，你还必须展示你与其他学生的不同
之处。
但是你应该在你的个人陈述中写下什么来使它脱颖而出呢
？以
下是我们的小贴士。
1.
先下手为强，现在就开始行动
马克·吐温有句名言：
“每天早上吃
一只活青蛙，你一整天都不
会遇到更糟的事。
”吐温从来没有说
过这句话，但是这个概念是正确
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的。先做你害怕做的事，剩下的就一帆风顺了。
所以，与其把表格的其余部分都填好，把你的个人陈述留到截
止日期之前不要动，还不如尽快开始思考你的个人陈述。做笔记，研
究你申请的大学，
并找出最好的方式来表达你会成为一个多么优秀的
学生。
2.
不要惊慌，也不要觉得吓人
一想到要写一篇
4000
字数的关于你自己的文章，你可能会感
到恐慌，但其实并没有那么多。大约
750
字，也就是一页半
A4
纸。
为了给你一些概念，
你的陈述应该和我们的
文章一样长，
而现在你已
经读了三分之一了。
< br>
3.
把你的个人陈述分成几部分
与其一口气写
750
个单词，不如把你的个人陈述分成几个不同
的部分，然后想出一两段来写。无论
你选择写什么，不管是关于你的
学习还是你的课外活动，一定要和你选择的主题有联系。
这种联系并不一定是显而易见的，
尽管如果你在申请兽医课程，
你当然应该提到你一直在当地的宠
物收容所帮忙。
技巧在于使你所说
的内容和你的整篇文章具有相
关性。
同时，
批判性地审视你想要写下的内容，
思考他们对你的评价，
以
及为什么你能成为一名好学生。
你在团队中工作了几年，
是否表
现
出了奉献精神？你从义工工作中学到了个人组织技巧吗？如果是，
那
么写下这些经历，这可以显示出你自己的个人特征。
4.
不要夸大你自己
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为
了让自己领先，你很容易夸大自己所做的事情，但不要这样
做。记住，读这些声明的人都
是专业人士，他们过去读过很多这样的
个人陈述，他们知道对你这个年纪的人来说哪些经
历是真实可信的
额。
5.
表达你的个性，而不是抄袭照搬别人的陈述
不要抄袭别人的陈述。不要从网上或朋友那里拿例子。大学招
生官们会使用诸如
Copycatch
这样的服务来检查所有的申请材料，
如果你的申请被发现与别人的太相似，
那么它就会被标记出来。
你应
该也不想还没开始就被
抓到作弊。
但是，
使用模板并使用你自己的详
< br>细信息填充它是可以的。有些人在面对空白页时需要额外的帮助。
6.
找别人帮你检查，并且听取他的
意见
首先，完成你的陈述。留出一
天左右的时间再读一遍，然后做
出你认为有必要的修改。用一种不同的方式阅读你的作品
是有帮助
的，把它打印出来或者在电子阅读器上阅读，而不是在屏幕上，这样
你就可以用不同的方式看单词了。
别忘了检查拼写。这听起来很明显，但是确保你的拼写和语法
正确是很重要
的。
你不能相信拼写检查程序。
有很多免费的在线服务
可以用来检查拼写，比如内置在
Word/Pages
< br>或其他文字处理软件
中的拼写检查器，但是通过人工检查拼写错误才是最好的一个
选择。
确保你知道你所使用的每一
个单词的意思。如果软件建议一个
同义词，在你把它包括进去之前，查一下字典，确保它
说的是你想要
的那个意思。
语言是很微妙的事情，
选择错误的语言可能是毁灭性的。
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