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低档作文如何升级为五档作文，策略告诉你
< br>书面表达得分较低的学生的写作特点：
1.
只使用简单的
词或短语；
2.
句式单一，单句较<
/p>
多；
3.
缺乏承上启下的词语和句子；
4.
不会使用从句；
5.
不会正确运用谓语动词或短语；
6.
不会使用倒装和强调句型。
高考书面表达侧重考查考生的语言运用能力，这就要求考生能够正确运用高级的词汇和
语法结构并能够熟练运用句与句之间的连接成分以使行文流畅。因此，
平时的写作训练中，
要学会恰当地运用高级句式和过渡语，使文
章“闪亮登场”。
第一讲
靓化词汇
——
学会运用高级表达
英语书面表达第五档作文中提到：语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力
使用较复
杂结构或较高级词汇所致。换句话说，如果考生使用高级词汇或句型，即使犯了
少量或轻微
的语言错误，也可不扣分，文章还是属于最高档次。因此，为了让文章档次高
，首先要学会
使用高级词汇。
高级词
汇的使用能够给文章增添色彩和画面感。它会大大提升文章的档次，从而帮助考
生获得高
分。要做到准确使用高级词汇，应该注意以下几个方面：
一、
使用亮点词汇的
4
种策略
[
策略
1]
“
语
”
众不同
，避免人云亦云
写作时恰当得体地使用别人可能想不到的词汇
或表达，会给阅卷老师耳目一新的感觉。
①
< br>(2019·
北京卷书面表达
)
I’m
very glad
to
know that
you’re
coming to
tour in China.
→
I
’
m
more than delighted
to know
that
you’re
coming to tour
in China.
②
(2019·
全国卷
Ⅰ
书面表达
)I
hope
you
can
consider
my
application
and
allow
me
to
be
a
volunteer.
→
I hope you can
take
my application
into consideration
and allow
me to be a volunteer.
③
(2019
·
全国卷
Ⅰ
书面表达
< br>)So
I
can
serve
as
a
volunteer
to
show
the
visitors
around
the
gallery and I am
sure
that I
am
fit for
the job.
→
So I can serve as a
volunteer to show the visitors around the gallery
and I
am convinced
that
I
am qualified
for
the job.
④
(2019·
全国卷
Ⅱ
书面表达
)
As
a
result,
enough
preparation
is
urgently
needed,
including
practice,
nutrition and a perfect plan.
→
As
a
consequence,
adequate
preparation
is
urgently
needed,
including
practice,
nutrition
and a perfect
plan.
⑤
(2019·
天津卷书
面表达
)I
want
to
make my voice heard.
→
I
feel an urge
to make my
voice heard.
⑥
Only when you
do more reading and writing can you
succeed
in improving your
English.
→
Only when you do
more reading and writing can you
make
it
in improving your English.
⑦
To our great joy, not only
are our classes lively and
appealing,
but our school life is also rich
and colorful.
→
To our great joy, not only
are our classes lively and
attractive,
but our school life is also rich
and colorful.
⑧
(2
018·
全国卷
Ⅱ
书面表达
)Great
changes
have
taken
place
in
our
school
in
the
last
few
years. And
the news
came that a short
film will be shown in our school.
→
Our school
has
witnessed
great changes in the last few
years. And
word
came that a
short
film will be shown in our school.
[
策略
2]
更新换代，避免重复
写作时应尽量避
免重复使用相同的词语，要用贴切多样的词语来展示自己的水平。用词
不同、表达方式迥
异，也是高级用法。
①
(2018·
天津卷书面表达
)On hearing the news,
some of my classmates and I formed a group
to
take part in
the competition. I know you once
took
part in
a robotics competition and won
the
award, so you must have accumulated
much experience in it.
→
On
hearing
the
news,
some
of
my
classmates
and
I
formed
a
group
to
take
part
in
the
competition.
I
know
you
once
participated
in
a
robotics
competition
and
won
the
award,
so
you
must have
accumulated much experience in it.
②
(2018·
全国卷
Ⅲ
书面表达
)Moreover
，
we
will
build
a
new
stadium
and
with
the
stadium
built
，
a wide
range of sports events are able to be held.
→
Moreover
，
we
will build a new stadium and with the stadium
set up
，
a wide
range of sports
events are able to be
held.
③
(2017·
全国卷<
/p>
Ⅲ
书面表达
)The team
will hold
many
activities
，
some of which
will appeal to
you
，
including
many matches.
→
The team will
hold
a range of
activities
，
some of which
will appeal to you
，
including
many
matches.
[
策略
3]
词汇运用，短语优先
当单词和短语表
示同一个意思时，优先使用短语。恰当使用短语，一方面能使文章更加
生动，另一方面也
能展示出学生扎实的语言功底。
①
(
2019·
全国卷
Ⅰ
书面表达
)
Besides,
I
know
English
and
I
can
express
myself
fluently
and
clearly, which helps me communicate
with our distinguished guests efficiently.
→
Moreover, I have a good
command of
English and I can express
myself fluently and clearly,
which
helps me communicate with our distinguished guests
efficiently.
②
(2019·
< br>全国卷
Ⅰ
书面表达
)For
one thing, I
know
Chinese
painting well, for my father is a
Chinese painter.
→
For one thing, I
am quite familiar with
Chinese painting, for my father is a Chinese
painter.
③
(2018·
天
津卷书面表达
)We desperately
need
your help.
→
We
are
desperately
in need of
your help.
④
(2018·
北京卷书面表达
)Last week, we took the foreign students in our school to experience
the authentic tea
culture, which
proved
to be
extremely rewarding.
→
Last
week, we took the foreign students in our school
to experience the authentic tea culture,
which
turned out
to be extremely rewarding.
[
策略
4]
用高级词汇取代简单词汇
为了表现自
己的语言功底，显示出自己的写作水平，应避免反复使用低年级学过的简单
词汇，尽量使
用高中阶段学到的词汇来代替。
①
(
2018·
北京卷书面表达
)
If
you take my advice you are
sure
to have the most
unforgettable
experience during your
college in Beijing.
→
So
long
as
you
take
my
advice
you
are
bound
to
have
the
most
unforgettable
experience
during your college in Beijing.
②
(2017·
天津卷书面表达
)Second
，
I
am
trying
my
best
to
acquire
the
essential
knowledge
and skills
concerning my position.
→
Sec
ond
，
I
am sparing
no effort to
acquire the essential
knowledge and skills concerning my
position.
③
(
全国卷
Ⅲ
书面表达
)I
should
say sorry for
being
unable to go to the bookstore with you on
Friday afternoon.
→
I
should
make
an
apology
for
being
unable
to
go
to
the
bookstore
with
you
on
Friday
afternoon.
二、写作的秘密武器
——
24
个高级
词汇
普通词汇
名词
chance
idea
result
have
动词
bear
develop
enough
形容词
proper
interesting
副词
finally
高级词汇
opportunity
opinion
consequence
possess
put up with
promote
adequate
appropriate
absorbing/
appealing
eventually
普通词汇
choice
people
effect
replace
understand
consider
rich
important
difficult
hardly
高级词汇
alternative
individual
influence
substitute
make
sense
of
take
into
account
abundant
vital/
significant
challenging
barely