英语作文

2021年1月19日发(作者：夏明翰)el much better and never want to have that much weight on my five-feet frame again. I bought two new suitcases last week. Everyday I practice jogging three miles, swimming fifteen laps, lifting twenty-pound weights and playing tennis for one hour. My mother was a premature baby. u3000u3000本段的controlling idea 是like to deep physically fit，但段中有两个irrelevant sentences，一个是I bought two new suitcases last week，另一个是My mother was a premature baby。 u3000u3000从上面两个例子可以看出，native speakers同样会造出来irrelevant sentences。卷面上如果这种句子多了，造成偏 题或离题，那问题就更严重了。

2、完整性

u3000u3000正象我们前 面说得那样，一个段落的主题思想靠推展句来实现，如果只有主题句而没有推展句来进一步交待和充实，就不能构 成一个完整的段落。同样，虽然有推展句，但主题思想没有得到相对圆满的交待，给读者一种意犹未尽的感觉。这 样的段落也不能完成其交际功能。例如： u3000u3000Physical work can be a useful form of therapy for a mind in turmoil. Work concentrates your thoughts on a concrete task. Besides, it is more useful to work —— you produce something rather than more anxiety or depression. u3000u3000本段的主题句是段首句。本段的两个推展句均不能回答主题句中提出的问题。什么是“a mind in turmoil”（心境不平静）Physical work又如何能改变这种情况？为什么 它能起therapy的作用？读者得不到明确的答案。因此，要达到完整就必须尽可能地简明。例如： u3000u3000It is not always true that a good picture is worth a thousand words. Often writing is much clearer than a picture. It is sometimes difficult to figure out what a picture means, but a careful writer can almost always explain it. u30 00u3000段首句所表达的主题思想是一种看法，必须有具体事例加以验证。上述两个推展句只是在文字上对 主题作些解释，整个段落内容空洞，简而不明。如果用一两个具体的例子的话，就可以把主题解释清楚了。比如下 段： u3000u3000It is not always true that a picture is worth a thousand words. Sometimes, pictures are pretty useless things. If you can't swim and fall in the river and start gulping water, will you be better off to hold up a picture of yourself drowning, or start screaming "Help"?

3、连贯性（ coherence）

u3000u3000连贯性包括意连和形连两个方面，前者指的是内在 的逻辑性，后者指的是使用转换词语。当然这两者常常是不可分割的。只有形连而没有意连，句子之间就没有内在 的有机的联系；反之，只有意连而没有形连，有时行文就不够流畅。 u3000u30001）、意连 u30 00u3000段落中句子的排列应遵循一定的次序，不能想到什么就写什么。如果在下笔之前没有构思，边写边 想，写写停停，那就写不出一气呵成的好文章来。下

ou are an employee, the more important it will be that you know how to convey your thoughts in writing or speaking. In the very large business organization, whether it is the government, the large corporation, or the Army, this ability to express oneself is perhaps the most important of all the skills a man can possess. u3000u3000这一段谈的是表达能力，它的重要性与职业，身份有关，从“not need much skill”或“of little importance”到“more important”，最后是“most important”。 u3000u3000b.由一般到特殊排列（general-to-specific arrangement） u3000u3000If a reader is lost, it is generally because the writer has not been careful enough to keep him on the path. This carelessness can take any number of forms. Perhaps a sentence is so excessively cluttered that the reader, hacking his way through the verbiage, simply doesn't know what it means. Perhaps a sentence has been so shoddily constructed that the reader could read it in any of several ways. Perhaps the writer has switched tenses, or has switched pronouns in mid-sentence, so the reader loses track of when the action took place or who is talking. Perhaps sentence B is not logical sequel to sentence A —— the writer, in whose head the connection is clear, has not bothered to provide the missing link. Perhaps the writer has used an important word incorrectly by not taking the trouble to look it up. He may think that "sanguine" and "sanguinary" mean the same thing, but the difference is a bloody big one. The reader can only infer what the writer is trying to imply. u3000u3000这一段谈的是a writer's carelessness，先给出一个general statement作为主题句，然后通过5个 ＂perhaps＂加以例证。 u3000u3000c. 由特殊到一般排列（specific-to-general arrangement） u3000u3000I do not understand why people confuse my Siamese cat, Prissy, with the one I had several years ago, Henry. The two cats are only alike in breed. Prissy, a quiet, feminine feline, loves me dearly but not possessively. She likes to keep her distance from people, exert her independence and is never so rude as to beg, lick, or sniff unceremoniously. Her usual posture is sitting upright, eyes closed, perfectly still. Prissy is a very proper cat. Henry, on the other hand, loved me dearly but possessively. He was my shadow from morning till night. He expected me to constantly entertain him. Henry never cared who saw him do anything, whether it was decorous or not, and he usually offended my friends in some way. The cat made himself quite comfortable, on the top of the television, across stranger's feet or laps, in beds, drawers, sacks, closets, or nooks. The difference between them is imperceptible to strangers. u3000u3000本段的主题句是段首句，它仅提出一个问题：为什么两只猫会被搞 混。然后对两者进行比较，末句才下结论。 u3000u30002）、形连 u3000u3000行文的逻 辑性常常要靠适当的转换词语及其他手段来实现。请读下面这一段

原则可以按re-，revo -, revolu-这几种方法移行。在移行时，我们还应特别注意以下几点: u3000u30001. 单音节词不能移行，即使是字母较多的单音节词，如through等也不能例外。 u3000u30002．缩略词如Mr.、Dr.等不能和后面的名字拆开移行。 缩略的专用名词如U.K.(the United Kingdom)、U.S.A(United States of America)等也不能拆开移行。 u3000u3000u30003．时间、量度及货币单位应视为一个整体；不能分开移行。 u3000u3000如: 11：00 P.M. 应写在一行内，不能将11：00和PM.分开移行；写38℃时，不能将38和℃分开移行。 u3000u3 0004．由“年、月、日”表示的日期。如果必须分开移行只能将“月、日”与“年”分开。如January 6，1980不能将January和6分开移行，但可以把January 6，和1980分成两行。 u3 000u30005．含双写辅音字母的单词，在移行时要将辅音字母拆开。如better可拆成better ，necessary可拆成necessary。 u3000u3000但如果双写辅音字母属于词根，后面 又加了后缀，就不能将两个辅音字母拆开。如drill加上- ing后构成了drilling，就不可以将它拆成成dril-ling，而只能拆为drilling。 u3000u3000例文： u3000u30001.宠物： u3000u3000A Talkative Parrot u3000u3000A lady worked in a company. There were a lot of shops on her way to work. One morning, when she was walking to work, she passed by a new pet shop. She was so excited when she saw a parrot sitting beside the door. She really loved birds. u3000u3000When she stopped to look at the handsome bird, it en211 to her, "Hey, lady, you are really ugly.” u3000u3000This made the lady very angry. She quickly left the shop and went to work. On her way home, she passed the same pet shop again. This time the parrot saw her again, it said immediately: u3000u3000"Hey lady, you are really ugly!" u3000u3000The lady tried to control herself. She walked to the shopkeeper and told him that if the parrot said it again, she would have the police come and take it away. "I'm so sorry, madam. I promise it won't happen again," the shopkeeper said. u3000u3000The next morning, when the lady walked past the pet shop, she pretended that she didn’t see it. But the parrot saw her at once and said to her quickly, "Hey lady." u3000u3000She stopped and looked at the bird coldly. "Yes?" she answered in an angry voice. u3000u3000The bird, sitting up straight and smiling at her, said, "You know." u3000u30002.人物： u3000u3000Elizabeth Bennet （伊丽莎白） u3000u3000The second daughter in the Bennet family, and the most intelligent and quick-witted, Elizabeth is the protagonist of Pride and Prejudice and one of the most well-known female characters in English literature. Her admirable qualities are numerous—she is lovely, clever, and, in a novel defined by dialogue, she converses as brilliantly as anyone. Her honesty, virtue, and lively wit enable her to rise above the nonsense and bad behavior that pervade her class-bound and often spiteful society. Nevertheless, her sharp

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编辑本段英语作文考试时注意的问题

1．认真审题立意
u3000u3000定文章之灵魂对命题作文必须认真审题，对自由作文必须立好意。文章要有明 确的主题，必须具备4个条件：准确、鲜明、深刻、集中。

2．草拟提纲

u3 000u3000打造文章之骨架审好题，立好意后，就要写提纲，打造文章的骨架。文章布局要做好3件事：安 排好层次段落，铺设好过渡，处理好开头和结尾。如命题作文中有提示句，还要从提示句的关键词出发，围绕关键 词开拓思路，发挥联想，记录下联想到的东西，可以是句子或单词词组，可以是英语或汉语。

3 ．写出段落主题句

u3000u3000理文章之脉络一篇短文的段落一般分为引导段、主题段 和结尾段。每段的主题句非常重要，是作者思维的起点，切题的准绳，阐述的对象。看到段落主题句，读者大致了 解段落要阐述的内容。段落主题句通常是一个语法结构完整、内容概括、用词简洁明了的单句。通常将段落主题句 置于段落的开头，可使文章结构更清晰，有说服力。

4．参照提纲

u3000 u3000紧扣主题句，完成各段落，充文章之血肉有了段落主题句后，还需要顺着段落主题句的方向，参照提纲 中的思路，从而完成各个段落。引导段要能引起读者的注意和兴趣，为主题段铺路架桥。主题段应围绕文章和该段 的主题来展开。展开的方式包括：顺序法、举例法、比较法、对比法、说明法、因果法、推导法、归纳法，和下定 义等。可以根据需要任选一种或几种方式。

5.注意

u3000u3000进 行这一步骤还需注意三方面问题： u3000u30001）确保提纲中段落结构的思路与各段主题句的一致性 。只有这样，才能保证所写段落不偏题，不跑题。 u3000u30002）要综合考虑各个段落的内容安排，避免段落内容的交叉。 u3000u30003） 用好连接词，注意段落间、句子间的连贯性。要做到所写文章层次分明，思路清晰，文字连贯，就需要在句与句之 间，段与段之间架起一座座桥梁，而连接词起的正是桥梁作用。 增加文采小窍门: 如果说第一、二步是对文章 的构思，第三、四步骤则是真正地“写”了，用词是否贴切，文法是否正确，句式是否多变，文采是否有生气，关 系到写作者的语言功底和水平，但也有些窍门是需要长时间累积的。