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2015
上海中考英语作文
题目：
i
want
to
invent
范文
1
及点评：
I
want
to
< p>inventa
flying
car
It
is
not
uncommon
to
< p>meettraffic
problems
and
< p>seriousair
pollution
in
big
city.
It
is
a
must
to
have
a
plan
to
improve
the
serious
condition.
I
get
an
< p>ideato
design
my
own
flying
machine
like
a
car
which
can
drive
we ll
in
the
street
as
well
as
fly
between
the
high
rises
to
avoid
< p>thetraffic
jam
.
What’s
more,
when
it
is
moving
,it
can
transform
the
motion
energy
into
el ectricity
to
drive
the
engine.
Thus,
it
is
possi ble
to
save
a
lot
of
fuel
and
reduce
the
air
pollution.
It
is
of
great
use
to
solve
< p>the
problems
of
traffic
jam
and
air
pollution
,and
even
save
the
nat ural
resource.
Bright
idea
can
only
be
achieved
with
the
determination
and
courage.
I
believe
my
idea
will
turn
a
new
< p>leafof
future
life.
——
新东方优能中考英语左丽娜老师
精彩亮点分析
：< /p>
亮点一
：高分短语
亮点二
：
it
is
a
must
活用高频词
亮点三
：定语从句描述自己设计的汽车
亮点四
亮点五
：
be
of
great
use
名词结构更高端
亮点六
：被动语态，丰富句式
亮点七
：
turn
a
new
leaf
of
future
life
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范文
2
< p>及点评：
I
want
to
inven t
a
time
machine
As
a
student
who
is
exper iencing
unprecedented
modern
lif e
nowadays
,
I
would
rather
learn
about
the
< p>historyand
the
future
< br>life
of
human
being
fro m
a
real
experience
than
learn
from
a
textbook.< /p>
That’s
why
if
I
can< /p>
work
as
a
great
inve ntor,
inventing
a
time
machine
will
be
my
first< /p>
choice
.
The
most
important
usage
of
my
ti me
machine
will
be
visitin g
one
of
best
schools< /p>
in
Tang
Dynasty.
As
we
all
know,
Tang
Dynasty< /p>
is
famous
for
its
< p>open-mindededucation.
Therefore,
when
I
visit
the
s chool
of
the
ancient
city,
I
can
not
only
try< /p>
different
ways
of
stud ying
but
communicate
with
people
from
different
countr ies
as
well.
Using
a
time
machine
is
the
most< /p>
vivid
way
to
learn
history
as
it
is
both
a
record
of
mankind
< br>and
a
mirror
of
past
,
I
am
looking
forward
to
the
day
when
my
time
machine
comes
out .
——
新东方优能中考英语郭娟老师
精彩亮点分
析
：
亮点一
：定语从句修饰对学生现在的生活
< p>亮点二
：用
would
rather
…
than
…
表达学生的意愿
亮点三
：用
if
条件状语从句表达主题
亮点四
：
be
famous
for
因
< p>…而著名
亮点五
：
not
< p>only…
but
…
as
we ll
不但
…
而且
…
亮点六
：用动名词词组做主语
亮点七
：用
idi om
突出历史的重要性
亮点八
：定语从句表达学生的期待
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范文
3
及点评：
I
Wan t
To
Invent
A
Family
Doctor
Robot
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