2013年浙江高考英语作文精讲精练“One Thing I’m Proud of”

2021年1月25日发(作者：黯然消魂)
2013
年浙江高考英语作文精讲精练


【原题回放】

【
2013
浙江卷】

请以“
One Thing I
’
m Proud of
”为题，用英语写一篇
100~120
个 词的短文，记述一件
你自己认为得意的事情。要求如下：

1.
记述事情的经过；

2.
简要说明你感到得意的原因或从中得到的启示。

注意：文章的标题已给出，不计入词数。

【参考范文】

One Thing I
’
m Proud of

I still remember how I became a good table tennis player.
The
first
day
I
went
to
high
school,
I
saw
some
of
my
classmates
playing
table
tennis.
Amazed at how skillful they were, I was determined to be just as good. Later on, I often watched
them carefully to learn their techniques. Then I kept practicing until I became confident enough to
challenge the good players. At the end of the term I became one of the best players in my class.
I am really proud of this experience, because it helps me realize that we all can fulfill our
potential and achieve our goals through hard work. It also helps me better understand the proverb

”

【亮点说明】

本篇书面表达要点全面，
语言 简练流畅，
时态、人称和标点符号使用正确，
很好的完成
了写作任务。
在作文 中作者开门见山提出自己想要写的事情，
然后详细记叙当时的情况。
最
后表明了自己对 这件事的认识和想法。在文中作者使用的
Later on, Then
，
At the end of
等词
汇清楚地表明了事情的发展过程，
给人一种脉络清晰的感觉 。
此外文中高级词汇和短语
fulfill
our potential
，
achieve our goals
和谚语“
Practice makes perfect
”的使用都成为了文章的亮点
所在。


【品鉴与提升】

示例一

One thing I am proud of
Everyone has things which he is proud of, so do I.
Three
years
ago,
it
was
a
sunny
day.
Everything
seemed
to
be
in
harmony.
Suddenly,
a
terrible thing happened. A dog was running after a little boy. It suddenly hit me that the boy was in
danger. I threw stones at the dog, but the dog wanted to bite me. Thanks to the passers-by, I was
saved. After a while, the boy’s mother arrived and praise
d me. She said gratefully that her son was
okay just because of me.
I am proud of what I did. When I was determined to save the boy, I even ignored my safety. I
won
’
t regret doing it.

修改一

One thing I am proud of
As is often the case, everyone has at least one thing that he is proud of. To be sure, I am no
exception.