山东省新高考模拟英语作文读后续写写作指导与解读(含范文)

2020届山东省新高考模拟
英语作文读后续写写作指导
一、续写原题
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一个完整的故 事短
文。续写的词数为150左右。
Though it is one of the faded memories of my life today, there are times
when I remember his face clearly, especially his eyes. As he had yellow spots on
his eyes we called him Spotty. He would have been a stray(流浪) dog, until he
came to me.
I was seven years old. My dad had just got a new job in Nasik. We had
moved into a rented house. It was raining very heavily on the day we moved.
It was a cold dark night. We had our meal and went to sleep. Somehow in
the midnight I heard some strange sounds outside the main door. I gathered
courage and looked out through the window and I was really amused with what I
saw outside.
There was a small puppy lying on an old doormat which my mother had put
outside the door. It was wet and trembling. At first it was difficult to see the little
one. It was the yellow spots on its eyes that made me realize its presence.
It was trying to get under the doormat to avoid the cold air outside and it
had managed to get in as I could see only its head outside the doormat. Was it
sick or injured?
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I felt pity for the poor soul. I went in and came out with an old towel. I went
near the innocent one and held it in my hand and wiped the puppy till he had
become dry. I took him into my room and made a bed for him with a woolen
blanket and a small pillow. He seemed very healthy and comfortable in his new
bed as he went to sleep immediately.
The next morning, everyone in the family came to know about the unusual
guest.
Like any other parents would, my parents first totally refused my idea but my
sister and I convinced them to keep Spotty.
Slowly Spotty got on with everyone and became one of the family members.
Paragraph 1:One day, Spotty returned from his daily walk with a broken leg.
____
Paragraph 2:Almost a year later, one midnight we heard Spotty barking
breathlessly ____

二、下水续写
总体思路
第一段第一句：Spotty有一天回家，断了一条腿。
作者当时的反应是什么？
看到了什么？
Spotty状态描写
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为什么会断了一条腿？(最难处理)
作者一定是误解了，对Spotty有过激的反应。
Spotty逃跑
到处寻找，但找不到
一段时间以后得知真相

第二段第一句：一年以后，我们听到Spotty在气喘吁吁地叫
看到了什么(骨瘦如柴)？
为什么Spotty叫起来气喘吁吁？
看到Spotty的情感反应并做了什么？
为什么Spotty回来？(最难处理)
心理的感受是什么？
为此做了什么？
但几天以后，Spotty还是死了。
作者的心情及感悟是什么(呼应开头...especially his eyes)？


下水体会：去掉5个关键词对续写没有多大的影响。续写部分情节安排太难了！尤
其 是：一、为什么Spotty会断了一条腿？二、一年以后Spotty为什么会回来？三、全
文的主题 是什么？花了不少时间考虑。最后确定将全文主旨定位在人与自然、动物的关系
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上-- 人与动物的和谐关系。另外，在描写上将eyes作为全文的一个重要线索并与开头
句...I remember his face clearly, especially his eyes呼应。


Paragraph 1:One day, Spotty returned from his daily walk with a broken
leg.
expression on his face. But Spotty seemed to take no notice of me and hid under
my bed, his whole body trembling and his eyes full of terror and distrust. It was
so unlike him to react like this, that for one moment I was at a loss how to coax
him to me. Feeling a little upset and furious, I somehow came holding a long
stick, trying to drive him out. However, before the stick reached him, Spotty
suddenly howled and escaped through the door. In the next few days, we
searched everywhere for Spotty, but in vain. Later, we were shocked to learn that
a man beat him with a stick when Spotty was approaching a little girl.
Paragraph 2:Almost a year later, one midnight we heard Spotty barking
rushed out of the house only to see my Spotty lying on the
doormat, dying. Upon seeing us, Spotty rose awkwardly to his feet, wagging his
tail and his eyes sparkling with excitement. Immediately, I knelt down to hug him
and tears began to well up in my eyes uncontrollably. Spotty looked at me,
licking my cheeks as if to tell me something. And it was at that moment that I
realized why Spotty returned to me--he had forgiven me for what I had done.
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Unfortunately, Spotty didn't stay long and he closed his eyes forever the next day.
Many years has passed since Spotty left us, but the valuable lesson he taught me
will remain in my memory.


参考范文
Days passed on and one evening when Spotty returned from his long walk,
he appeared very exhausted. He came to my room and sat near me. It was then
that I saw his hind leg was injured and was bleeding. I called out my mother and
she quickly tied a bandage around his leg and gave him food to eat. I was very
upset. But the next day, Spotty was up to his usual pranks though he limped a bit.
After this incident my relation with Spotty became more intense. I really admired
him a lot for his courage.
Almost a year later, one midnight we heard Spotty barking breathlessly. We
came out and saw that he was barking continuously heading somewhere. After
some time Spotty became quiet. I patted him on his back and came inside. The
next day morning, my heart skipped a beat when I didn’t see Spotty. I searched
for him in each and every corner but he was nowhere. And this time he had gone
and would never come back. I cried and waited for him. We waited for one long
week. But there were no signs of him. Then one day my Dad got transferred to
Mumbai. We shifted back to Mumbai. What would have happened to Spotty?
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Would he have died? These were the only questions in my mind, but they all
remained unanswered forever.（仅供参考）

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